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RPslayer feedback. - The_Godslayer - 02-04-2021 Version 2: significantly cleaner, significantly shorter. Character List ![]() ![]() Meko (Ling)'s identical twin brother, Vagrant Infected, former Commune. Currently fucking around in deep space somewhere probably near Kepler trying to figure out what the real core of humanity is (which Gardener is already years ahead of him in because Ghods rejects his humanity and shuns it while Gardener hates it and embraces it all the same).
Splash page on him and his brother's early life, given that they were basically inseparable. ![]() ![]() Ghods twin brother, Lane Hacker. Married to the slave he bought from Malta to have as a maid/bodyguard/companion that didn't cost money more than once. Has twin children. Currently neck deep in tracking down Kusari Jump-Bridge tech and figuring out what's up there.
He went to a party that one time. Science Fiction with Kusari stuff Brianna Ling Former field slave from Malta, Brianna Cross, born and raised in slavery. Bought by Ling, trained in espionage and fighting by Ling. Not sure how she actually developed feelings, likely just a lot of close contact and familiarity. Pulse happened, shutting down Jump Travel and locking Ling at home in his Pecos bunker/mansion, and Brianna decided it was time to claim the Ling.
Michael Ling Mr. and Mrs. Ling's son, twin brother of Lilith Ling. Golden Retriever boy, happy to do whatever he's asked, tends to solve problems with straightforward methods such as breaking things and throwing hands. Will grow into a strong sense of honor, fixated on trying to be his dad and all the honor and glory and heroism he associates with him.
Lilith Ling Mr. and Mrs. Ling's daughter, twin sister of Michael Ling. Psychopath child, expert manipulator by the tender age of two, has a lot of practice with making Michael do things. Rips the wings off of butterflies, burns flies under magnifying glasses, understands what dying is and will kill you nonetheless, probably with poison. Will grow into a hyperintelligent villainess, fixated on trying to not be her mother and all the weakness she associates with her.
Magnus Demichase Father of Ghods and Ling, DSE engineer. Shortly after the twins were born, his wife went out to look for a way to arrange a way to get their whole family into the Zoners because she really hated Liberty and thought it was a evil fascist dictatorship with sham elections. She disappeared in Kepler, and he did NOT handle that well, ended up stealing a bunch of medical scans of her brain to try and build an A.I. version of her (Autonomous AI being very illegal), got caught and stripped of basically everything, and sent to Pittsburgh to raise his two sons in the mines and slums by himself. Also did not give up on the robowife project. Died of overworking and a heart attack in his home.
Helena Demichase Mother of Ghods and Ling, former Bunter. Died for plot and because I didn't really want to write any kind of love interest at that point because it is hard as shit to make love interests not 2D and uninteresting. Basically irrelevant.
Magnus Demichase 2 (Helena-2): Robowife. Activated as a failsafe a while after Magnus Sr. died. Kicked around the house and really decorated the tomb of Magnus, got depressed as shit, rejected her name as Helena because she figured she had already failed to be her. Magnus dead, Ghods and Meko fled the house, so she went to Bounty Hunting. Got so good at it she eventually joined the Core, specifically a group called the Headhunters. They went on the Pillar Men event, mostly died. She was on the Mars when it got taken over by AI, but didn't die because she doesn't actually need to breathe. Got mistaken for a regular maintenance robot, eventually escaped and got onto Gammu, but is stuck and dying because it's not like she can put out a distress signal or anything, that'd attract the natives.
She's just chillin. Losing her mind while dying. Crystal Demichase: Actually a part of the Ling family, but wholly removed right now. Ghods went back to check on his hometown, found it mostly empty and absorbed by a different town run by Xenos gang. Killed everyone there with alien powers and severe tech diff, except her. She, after watching a full town of people get murdered in front of her, chose to follow him in a dust storm and ask to die as well. He responded to this by kidnapping her and brainwashing her with telepathy because he is sane and stable, and then bio-modding the shit out of her body until she was a basically alien superhuman like him. Because he is sane and stable. Then, when he peaced out, the final straw with Vagrants was had and Wyoming said "hey, here's an old defunct defender that we don't have the resources to bring up to modern standards. gtfo forever." Right now she's kicking around the Xenos at Ouray because she's a good enough pilot that the fact that she showed up one day in a 30+ year old defender stopped mattering. Also helps that she's never caused so much as an argument. ![]() Sh'ozak Started as Sh'ozak the Weaver. General maintenance worker in the Dyson Sphere. When the Collapse happened, they had the foresight just barely to gtfo, mostly because they were a worker and not a fighter. Collapse hit, leaving her stranded in the Deep Omicrons and generally full of pain, but since she was very much not a fighter, she was kinda bad at hiding, so the Order caught and attacked her several times. Having no real way to heal herself, either, she limped along basically waiting to die, thinking she was the last Nomad alive. She actually got way better at fighting and hiding as time went on, but also got more wounded. Eventually, she did hear from an Order patrol that she was stalking that there was another outbreak of Nomad activity, so she made it her directive to get there, and Limped all the way from the Outcast edge of Omicrons into Iota, nearly dead on arrival. Mindshare caught her up and scraped all the nastiness and repaired her, and she became Sh'ozak the Survivor.
Declared war that one time. Actually twice. Also tormented a mercenary. And then turned into a one instead of the regular Nomad many. And then I tried to write "loss of control" horror. "Tried" being the operative word. The Gardener (Nikolaus Strauss) A gunnery officer from the Battleship Wotan. His family had a long history of serving in the Rheinland military, and he was no different. Most fathers died in war in his family, and he didn't, so he was ready to settle down and live a married life with his wife, who was a secretary for some government officials. Government officials who happened to be Infested, and tended to be surrounded by civilians as body/PR shields. This did not stop the newly formed MND from blowing them the fuck up, Strauss's wife and unborn son in the mix. Strauss handled this poorly, deciding to study psychology and philosophy until he had a doctorate in it. He wrote a lot of books, figured out that the MND were after the Nomads, and decided to just throw himself into the Nomads so that he could die and be with his wife at the very least. He did not die, instead Nomads infested him, but he was so viscerally sad and angry that the psychic additions of the Nomad started ripping the two of them to shreds inside each other's minds. To stave off complete oblivion, what remained of the Infiltrator and Strauss joined and fused into the Gardener, one of the nastiest creatures the Wilde ever managed to create.
He is to blame for Sh'ozak's most recent change. He is also not in her good books. He isn't in Hans's good books either. He couldn't even make it into Caliban's good books. He's committing sins against the flow of time. He's even committing sins against the fabric of reality. Sins against the cycle of life and death ?!?!? Hans Turing/Sai Teigisha/Michael Townsend/Minamoto Sara Hans Turing was a boarding captain from the Wotan, briefly acquainted with Strauss. When recovery teams came through the wreckage of the Wotan, the Wilde caught Hans and took him to Kaarst to use his resilience for another project targeted at eliminating the threat of Incubi being found. Hans's biology was completely overhauled, his real shape being a gangly, freakishly elongated humanoid monster. However, with mechanisms copied from octopods, chameleons, and shit that Nomads just spitballed, Hans can change the color and texture of his skin, the position of his bone, muscle, and ligament structure, and fat distribution, allowing him to shapeshift. Not only is he Hans Turing for Division 7 of the MND, but he also masquerades as Sai Teigisha for the Farmer's Alliance, Michael Townsend for Pirates in Bretonia, and Minamoto Sara for the Golden Chrysanthemums.
Hound Hound was a pretty simple AI, completely uninterested with individuality before the Core took over. After being enslaved and made to fight for a bit, Hound became incredibly resentful of Core, but during his time there he got very attached to Magnus, partially because she was also a machine, and partially because she was actually really patient with him and gave a sort of motherly tone (because thats literally what she was programmed to do). Then Hesione took over the Mars, which Magnus was on, killed everyone by spacing, and left. Hound responded to this by swearing to destroy all of Gammu. When Core was evacuating Gammu, Hound was there simply trying to blow out the Mars' engines, to try and kill Hesione. Yeah that didn't work, so Hound put together the Garmr Network, to go bounty hunting, consolidate training and analyze expert pilots, and generally create a team of the most deadly Core AIs ever so that next time he gets a shot, he WILL kill Hesione.
Chronic bitch dependency is no laughing matter, Mr. Hound. It can fuck with your friends, your health, and scary enough even your money. Astraea When Sh'ozak was readying herself to really go to war in Zeta, and start pushing to cripple the Order, she collected all the parts of herself that she associated with weakness, ideas and emotional tendancies that would hinder her in the upcoming battles, and cut them out, creating the permanently-sobbing Astraea, because getting cut out of someone hurts. This new mind, the rejected pieces of Sh'ozak, was sent in the direction of Vagrants because "weakness is all they do", however she is also not the biggest fan of the Vagrants, precisely because she views them as weak and unable to bring about the changes they want. Birth Certificate. Agent Ryker König BDM Agent, formerly RM Boarding Marine. Born on Stuttgart, generally subjected to LWB attacks because his parents were on-site engineers for Synth factory machines. He joined the Military, served as a boarding marine during the Hudson War, did a lot of cool shit there, got permanently disfigured. Then, while he was training to be an RM pilot, the Rheinland Civil War happened, and his parents died when LWB decided to just bomb the shit out of Stuttgart's factories and their worker's homes. Logically, the LWB is the enemy, and RM decided to side with LWB and Unioners for this, so Ryker ended up with the Federalists. After the war ended, he just kept piloting for the MND until someone finally asked him wtf he was doing, after which he officially joined the Buro.
Full bio. Rev. Dr. Mattaias Armstrong (Agent Excelsus) Liberty Security Force Senior Agent. Serves only Liberty, which means he tends to be a pain in the ass for Liberty forces who want to do things for themselves or not commit warcrimes. Genuinely views everything as "Liberty" or "Disposable". His religion is Liberty, and if it ain't Liberty it ain't good. Bodybuilder because Liberty bodies are perfect and it's right to perfect them even further. Traitors to Liberty are subhuman, probably demons, and it is morally right to kill them. This includes Order, Hellfire/Harmony/Insurgents, and generally people in other factions who come from Liberty. Liberty criminals are just misguided, but their heart's in the right place. Xenos have a point but are going about it the wrong way. Lane Hackers have a point but are going about it the wrong way. Rogues are drunk on their own Liberty Superiority, which is understandable but still bad. Has a weird mostly fighting but sometimes a little flirty relationship with Psyche (???) might be trying to colonize Vagrants, we'll see.
Arthur Wellerman Former BAF cruiser captain, currently Planetform Freighter captain and BIS prison ship warden. Joined the Armed Forces to flex that he wasn't a Weller and didn't have to be a businessman in his future. Retired after battle of NL because his cruiser was totaled hitting a "mr president get down" and saving a battleship from a Warwolf. He also wasn't doing well mentally because he DID make the choice to sacrifice people he knew for the greater good.
Here's biographies for all of his crew. Minus Mr. Kirkpatrick because I am running low on inspiration and motivation rn. Joan and Jeanne d'Auvergne Twin Gallic countesses, chasing military fortune to re-establish their family's wealth. Except Auvergne got deleted and retconned, so they're actually like fucking ghost people that no one knows anything about and no one knows how they got there. Also their singing is actually hypnotic and no one knows why and most people are afraid of it because literally imagine two women that can just make you feel unimaginable, heartwrenching grief by singing a sad song. BIS Prisoner aboard Wellerman's ship for warcrimes during the Gallic war. Caught by Wellerman.
Taminba Mufefwe African Coalition, chasing military glory as a traditional cultural demand of his tribe. Considered dead by his people because he was captured, and Bretonia are evil savages who murder, torture, and pillage, so being captured means you're dying slow and painfully at the very least. BIS Prisoner aboard Wellerman's ship for warcrimes shortly after the Coalition attack on the Battleship Stirling. Caught by Wellerman.
Matthew O'Shea Political science student who decided Bretonia was the greatest evil and that everything was hopeless and it was time to bomb the awards ceremonies because they were shows to indoctrinate people into Bretonian nationalism and distract them from the crimes against Dublin and Gaia. He actually managed to do it, but BIS and BAF on scene managed to get him into a stasis pod and keep him alive. Now he's a prisoner aboard Wellerman's ship. Wellerman's award was the one he bombed.
Damien Kirkpatrick Hellfire Legion bomber pilot that overextended into Manchester hunting a Junker that scammed him and his friends. He's mainly there to be Australian to compliment Matthew's Irish and Arthur's British.
Here's his first day in the crew. Charles Taylor and Devon Kingston Regular, completely unimpressive Bretons, literally just chilling. Following Arthur wherever he goes because you're guaranteed adventure, danger, and survival if you stick with Arthur. He's their good luck charm from when they all were on The Milkmaid. They're also married gay guys but that's never actually plot relevant, it's just so that none of you freaks can romance them. I know who you are.
John Paul Jones Tau pirate, captained the stolen IMG cruiser Devil's Reach. The only Wellerman prisoner that got away, and the reason for some significantly higher BIS vetting of approved prisoners for the Wellerman project.
Kazu Chidori KNF Pilot, enlisted during and served in the Sigma war against Rheinland. Big woman, tall (198cm) and strong, has the personality of a very honorable bull in a china shop. Basically was raised a man due to being the firstborn. Hates the shit out of Auxo because they came after her dad for trolling with adapted nomad guns too much, and are the reason why her dad doesn't fly anymore. At this point is actually like a triple war vet, and now a part of the Totsugekitai, which I still have no idea what that means or what she's actually supposed to be doing.
Kazu Tsuruno Kazu's younger sister, socialite business major finding upper management success despite being a woman, probably because she had her personality tempered by her hard ass father and sneaky ass mother.
Kazu Hoang Former GMG, got adopted by the Kazu family's patriarch and allowed/commanded to be heir to the family because grandpa Katsunaga knew his daughter was a problematic woman that could not be left unchecked ever. He's basically a big, boisterous, traditional foil for his small, sneaky, subversive wife.
Kazu Kumano Only daughter of Katsunaga, generally a problem child who did such things as poisoned the tea of a teacher (rightfully, because that teacher bullied her), manipulated all the boys into her own private security detail, blackmailed a corporation that was trying to intiate a buyout of a set of the private school grounds, and other things. Nicknamed "Black Cypress", now is a very obsessive housewife who successfully grew old with her husband.
Jacinto d.l.Parca Jacinto the Phoomslayer, redux of the sorta-character I played way before I had a forum account. He's now a grandpa at the age of 76, still flying somehow. Might shift him towards being an AC7 reference. Mihaly Dumitru Margareta Corneliu Leopold Blanca Karol Aeon Ignatius Raphael Maria Niketas A. Shilage type shit. Married to his older wife, he literally got his hand in marriage won by her. She also pilots.
Rosa Parca Yes it's a shitty Rosa Parks joke. La Parca Rosa is just regular killer woman, Corsair brand. Idk how to play her though so she doesn't really show up.
Doidld Tyatsmr Yes it's a shitty Donald Trump in cyrillic joke. Originally a meme character for Voltaics, just a gopnik, Tarancon fucking died because of Order and most of his friends left, and the Tarancon survivors were suddenly under his command, however much Junkers have command structures, so he needed to lock tf in and I needed to unmeme him and make him a serious character. Now he is very much a pseudo-anarchist businessman, taking a heavy Mafia approach to regular Junker business. Piracy, ransom, assassinations are all on the itinerary, as well as cutting back-ally deals and trying to influence governments.
On the topic of shitty jokes, I figured out where his charpic is from after 5 years. It's smut. Strange, disturbing, questionably consensual smut. Maxamillion Kress Loosely connected to the Ling family by being the second in command during the twins time as gangsters on Pittsburgh. Accidentally signed up for a group suicide thinking it was an actual research mission with no education needed, and all the people there for the actual reason realized he was just a regular guy trying to live his life and were like "you need to eat us and survive" because there was basically no supplies on the ship. He didn't handle that well. He then tried to join a colony ship that fucked around deep Omicrons, but there was a couple infested on board that the Order tracked down, infested that had the ability to cloak their incubi to the version of infected scanners that was current at the time. So Order held the Colony Ship hostage until the colony revolted and tried to fight back, and when the 22 guns of neutrality started shooting and the Order agents started boarding the ship, Max ran away during the confusion. He didn't handle that well. Now he's kicking around FP10 with an artifact connected to the Midden, keeping the refugees from Malta's slave revolt in line with an iron fist. Also his name is technically Cháurez, but since his mom was Libertonian and uneducated, she couldn't pronounce it right, and Kress is the result.
He does a little bit of living. He's also about to be harassed by woman. Anton Kress Max's little brother, tried to hold everything together after both the Ling family and Max left them on the surface, but he simply couldn't, he ain't have that dog in him. Anton tried to chase his brother out to the Omicrons and the Colony Ship Wrocław, but got accosted by aliens and press-ganged into the Order after they saved him.
Abdul al-Sami Arab Coalition. Patriarch of the family al-Sami, the family that's generally considered to be a scribe and lorekeeper family. Despite that, he's also the forefront of the Loyal Sons of Tigris' foray into space, sparking a new, though significantly smaller sect of Coalition fighters. He's been so successful with bringing LSOT to space that he's got a whole cruiser of them now.
An event writeup for that cruiser. Lucas Cardoso Senor Caballero La Orden Hospitalaria de los Caballeros del Pacto de los Sitos Sagrados de Malta y la Sacro Santa Verna. That is, he's a religious leader charged with keeping the holy sites of Malta safe from intruders/graverobbers, also takes care of people seeking pilgrimages, and other such activities.
John Martin Royalist fighter pilot, unknown origin, known fanaticism, has been around since the Gallic war. Actually a servant family for the d'Auvergnes, but since Auvergne deleted, also demoted (promoted?) to unknown ghost individual. Fighting the good fight to bring back the monarchy and the nobles to Gallia. Hey, would you look at that? Bbcode!!! I'm literally such a high effort rper pls praise me :) RE: RPslayer feedback. - WizardLizard - 02-04-2021 funny joke characters make me go "haha that was funny". 10/10 - WizardLizard, bestselling author RE: RPslayer feedback. - Groshyr - 02-04-2021 No Gaul = no fun RE: RPslayer feedback. - The_Godslayer - 02-04-2021 (02-04-2021, 04:56 PM)Groshyr Wrote: No Gaul = no fun When Lynx is fun to fly, I will make Gaul. That is the deal. RE: RPslayer feedback. - The_Godslayer - 02-09-2021 Upudaito: Kazu added to main characters for the purpose of further harassing KNF players and various other things that probably have nothing to do with bullying Werdi into submission. Probably. RE: RPslayer feedback. - Emperor Tekagi - 02-09-2021 You do realize I check this thread, ye? But a main char now, hm? So a third MD? Nice! RE: RPslayer feedback. - Reeves - 02-09-2021 (02-04-2021, 08:58 AM)The_Godslayer Wrote: she weighs a good 600kg
RE: RPslayer feedback. - LaWey - 02-09-2021 Quote:Female KNF officer Quote:with her 198cm of height
RE: RPslayer feedback. - The_Godslayer - 02-09-2021 (02-09-2021, 02:53 PM)Anton Okunev Wrote:Quote:Female KNF officerQuote:with her 198cm of height
RE: RPslayer feedback. - The_Godslayer - 02-09-2021 (02-09-2021, 01:25 PM)Emperor Tekagi Wrote: You do realize I check this thread, ye? But a main char now, hm? So a third MD? Nice! Third MD comes after full RP story. Chidori-chan for emperor. |

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