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Am I getting through? - Das Wilde Wesen - 04-22-2008
"This is CNS News bringing you another update from the Wilde Host who has been sending us his story. We take you to this latest development now."
*the man from the previous news broadcast appears again on the screen.*
"Fellow Humans, I beg of you, tell me you are receiving these messages and understanding them. Come help me before *It* wakes up."
*the screen goes black*
(//Feedback on This is my Story, Let it be Heard goes here please.//)
Am I getting through? - sovereign - 04-22-2008
Its good, and helping me write my stuff. Keep it up. I'd write more but internet's about to shut off...
Am I getting through? - Praetyre - 04-22-2008
You (and others) may also be interested in Monk's Wilde-related story, if you are interested in that genre;
http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=13972
Am I getting through? - mwerte - 04-22-2008
there is also CRI-Specimen092 by AC Merc that I enjoyed reading. But that's not a Wild story.
Am I getting through? - Das Wilde Wesen - 04-27-2008
"Help me!! can you hear me? Help!"
Am I getting through? - sovereign - 04-27-2008
Its awesome. Keep it up.
Am I getting through? - Tarkis - 04-28-2008
Simply great writing, there's nothing more to say.
Am I getting through? - mwerte - 05-11-2008
Cool so far, although the different symbols and stuff gets confusing.
Am I getting through? - AdamantineFist - 05-11-2008
Very good. I love the story, keep it up. Oh, I did notice one small thing. In post 5, there was one instance of "[color-#ffffff]" just sitting there. Better fix that.;)
Am I getting through? - jimmarkey - 05-11-2008
Very good, can't wait for the next section. One instance I noticed was there is a Nomad speaking without white text in this section:
The forces that were assembled were less then half of the forces shown though, but the Creatures proceeded anyway. And when they came through the JumpGate there were no more friendly forces, at least no intact ships. A cruiser was slowly rotating as fires raged through the interior. And there were full fleets of fighters and bombers escorting Assault Cruisers, that I noted with dismay, were configured for disgorging marines onto capital class ships.
Nomads, you will surrender at once and leave the humans you have captured.
*** <Our ships tearing the new groups fighters apart> Community will be preserved ***
Then...Nothingness, no Community, alone
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