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RE: Morph logs: Madze.Nabucodonosor - Piombo65 - 03-29-2016
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2016-03-29 17:55, Omicron Delta system, near Freeport 11RE: Morph logs: Madze.Nabucodonosor - Piombo65 - 04-02-2016
In Omicron Delta there are only Capital ships, no fights...
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RE: Morph logs: Madze.Nabucodonosor - Piombo65 - 04-03-2016
RE: Morph logs: Madze.Nabucodonosor - Nosferath - 04-03-2016
Okay, you seem to have gotten rid of all those symbols, except for the periods which you have increased tenfold. I..... don't..... know..... you..... but..... I'd..... have..... one..... hell..... of..... a..... time..... reading..... this. And so would other players. Don't separate every word. Use an ellipsis (...) when you need to separate two phrases or add some pause.
Enough with the visual aspect, let's see the content: Nomad speech is not "Tarzan english". You can't just delete some words here and there and call it a day. Nomad is more like symbolic english, with some minor changes. Snoopy already mentioned the possessive pronouns thing, and you're already doing it. Good. Be more visual and/or poetic when you talk about things. This can take time so it's not urgent , for now.
In short: Drop the infinite periods, make phrases more complete. Use the symbol guide that Snoopy gave you, or make up your own meanings for some symbols, but don't exaggerate. You can check other logs for inspiration or guidelines.
RE: Morph logs: Madze.Nabucodonosor - Piombo65 - 04-03-2016
(04-03-2016, 05:35 PM)Nosferath Wrote: Okay, you seem to have gotten rid of all those symbols, except for the periods which you have increased tenfold. I..... don't..... know..... you..... but..... I'd..... have..... one..... hell..... of..... a..... time..... reading..... this. And so would other players. Don't separate every word. Use an ellipsis (...) when you need to separate two phrases or add some pause.
Enough with the visual aspect, let's see the content: Nomad speech is not "Tarzan english". You can't just delete some words here and there and call it a day. Nomad is more like symbolic english, with some minor changes. Snoopy already mentioned the possessive pronouns thing, and you're already doing it. Good. Be more visual and/or poetic when you talk about things. This can take time so it's not urgent , for now.
In short: Drop the infinite periods, make phrases more complete. Use the symbol guide that Snoopy gave you, or make up your own meanings for some symbols, but don't exaggerate. You can check other logs for inspiration or guidelines.
Ok! Thanks!
I used the miss words for "translation effects". But finally I must only say all the words and use more synonyms. Got It!
RE: Morph logs: Madze.Nabucodonosor - Cælumaresh - 04-03-2016
As nosferath said, please decrease the amount of dots in your text, it was a pain to get it fully, just because of that amount of dots.
Like, if you want to question someone's motivs for being in a system, you could say something along the lines of this:
** What .. is -yours- purpose in ~Ours~ seas/void (curious) **
Piombo Wrote:[03.04.2016 17:03:41] Madze.Nabucodonosor: ***If..it...so.......why......-Zoner ship-...aim.....'ours'...(?)***
As to this, you could also say something like:
** Reason .. of ~Darkling / Metal whale~ hurting -Ours- shell (?) **
FYI, i flew there as Thalia
RE: Morph logs: Madze.Nabucodonosor - Piombo65 - 04-03-2016
(04-03-2016, 07:28 PM)Caelumaresh Wrote: As nosferath said, please decrease the amount of dots in your text, it was a pain to get it fully, just because of that amount of dots.
Like, if you want to question someone's motivs for being in a system, you could say something along the lines of this:
** What .. is -yours- purpose in ~Ours~ seas/void (curious) **
Piombo Wrote:[03.04.2016 17:03:41] Madze.Nabucodonosor: ***If..it...so.......why......-Zoner ship-...aim.....'ours'...(?)***
As to this, you could also say something like:
** Reason .. of ~Darkling / Metal whale~ hurting -Ours- shell (?) **
FYI, i flew there as Thalia
Now i know it. Thanks
RE: Morph logs: Madze.Nabucodonosor - Piombo65 - 04-06-2016
Ok, now I see that there aren't the log time...
RE: Morph logs: Madze.Nabucodonosor - Piombo65 - 04-10-2016
RE: Morph logs: Madze.Nabucodonosor and Madze.Kar'Belt - Piombo65 - 04-28-2016
New Nomad ship in my account: Madze.Kar'Belt