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Marvin J. Orphelia - Akura - 04-22-2010
I read it... and.... I think it can only be described in two words:
WHAT SIЯ?
The whole thing was like stabbing myself in the eye with a needle to cover the massive amounts of plotholes, it's like reading a sieve...
I mean, usually I'd try to give suggestions on how to make it better, or how to develop it, or how to improve...
But... this is irretrievable...
I like stories of love and attention, this just seems to be you attempting to justify overcompensation.
I mean, if BSs were SRP only, you'd never, ever get one.
Marvin J. Orphelia - Camtheman Of Freelancer4Ever - 04-22-2010
Name some plot holes and ill fill them with quicksand like I did the last few posts arguging with Dabbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbykins.
Believe it or not, Akurwraarwarwar.
That's constructive critistism. Figured you wouldnt know how though.
Marvin J. Orphelia - Dusty Lens - 04-22-2010
On the plus side Cam your story has gotten more feedback in 5 minutes than mine will ever XD
Marvin J. Orphelia - Dab - 04-22-2010
' Wrote:Name some plot holes and ill fill them with quicksand like I did the last few posts arguging with Dabbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbykins.I just facepalmed. Oh so hard.
Then, realizing it was insufficient, went and banged my head on the apparently-invisible steel undercoating available on biodomes. Then, while too dazed to go back to flying, watched the 69th Zoner Infantry duke it out until my head cleared.
Marvin J. Orphelia - Camtheman Of Freelancer4Ever - 04-22-2010
Quote:On the plus side Cam your story has gotten more feedback in 5 minutes than mine will ever XD
I dont know if its good feedback... lol
Quote: went and banged my head on the apparently-invisible steel undercoating available on biodomes.
I thought this would be obvious to you dab, The Dev.
Just like docking with carriers.
You have to RP its there......*sigh*
Marvin J. Orphelia - Elsdragon - 04-22-2010
Steel undercoating would not stop a Dauman Devastator/and or Anything bigger than a Handgun. these are -lazors- after all.
Marvin J. Orphelia - Akura - 04-22-2010
Is this what Discovery is coming to?
Marvin J. Orphelia, Nekos, Ghostships, Indie Nomads?!
I'm sorry Cam, but dude, start again, and fly a fighter.
Marvin J. Orphelia - Dusty Lens - 04-22-2010
Don't listen to the haters Cam. Igiss wouldn't have invented Solaris turrets if he didn't intend them to be used!
Furthermore almost everyone posting in this thread has their own LOLWUT story. Some of them still ongoing.
Some of them probably consider their story to be srzbsns.
Write it. Reflect on it. Learn from it. The next one will come along.
Marvin J. Orphelia - Sprolf - 04-22-2010
' Wrote:Commised an entire war fleet to be built in around 19 years? Without any other Zoner noticing or having a say in it?
Yes, I always found that exact period of time an unlikely one to build an entire warfleet in, even with unlimited resources. (This is not a jab at you, Cam. CoughKusariCoughcoughcough.)
Your story is... well, it's an interesting read.
For all the people working on squashing your story because it's too far-fetched or blown out of proportion... look at some other stories. An immediate example of something near this magnitude is the story of Salazar Kithe - we don't whine about him, now do we? If you want to RP a cyborg making an army... well, that's an interesting idea for a story, and I have to say that it wasn't a horrid read either. Could be better, but it could be worse.
No.
The way I see it, you're free to explore Freelancer however you think it is to be interpreted.
After all, that's the fun of roleplay here. Everyone looks at it differently, and that provides the engaging variety that keeps things fresh and exciting. Feel free to explore what you'd like to, and write what you'd like to. ('Course, keeping within canon details is something to look after, naturally. Not saying that sort of criticism is bad. Saying "Only this person can do this" arbitrarily is unnecessarily restrictive.)
Just because you're a capwhore, that does not mean we have to flame you everywhere else.
Marvin J. Orphelia - Dab - 04-22-2010
' Wrote:An immediate example of something near this magnitude is the story of Salazar Kithe - we don't whine about him, now do we?You obviously are not in enough Skype chats.