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Feedback on 'Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra' RP - Dopamino - 03-09-2008
Argh! I hate friggin cliff-hangers!
Feedback on 'Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra' RP - MB52 - 03-09-2008
' Wrote:Well I like it. :) Good work, whoever-you-are.
Yeah, good work, whoever you are. :)
Feedback on 'Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra' RP - jammi - 03-09-2008
Damn... I want to write like that some time... And how could you! Why leave it like that!? More! More!
Feedback on 'Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra' RP - Dopamino - 03-10-2008
Latest update is very well written, but pretty twisted. Could you change the age she got raped at to like 4 or 6 instead of 2? 2 is just really sick, plus she probably wouldn't remember something from that age. She might be able to remember feeling pain, etc., but not anything more specific than feelings.
Feedback on 'Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra' RP - Zapp - 03-10-2008
It's supposed to be twisted. It's supposed to be pretty sick. That's the point. Read on. It get's better.
Quote:Yeah, good work, whoever you are.
I couldn't help myself...
Feedback on 'Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra' RP - Dopamino - 03-10-2008
Still, 2 is just too young. I don't even know if it's possible for a full-grown man to...with a two year old. I don't think anything would be lost by changing it to 5 or 6.
Feedback on 'Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra' RP - Jihadjoe - 03-10-2008
It's very very good. Very little on this forum has actualy moved my emotionally, and usualy I'm pretty detatched, but this is very, very good.
I know someone who was abused as a child, and the shamed look you describe is exactly right. Maybe you should add a warning to the title of it, "may find this harrowing".
Aside from that, the writing style is just getting better.
Can i ask somewhat ahead of time, do you plan to carry on this RP ad infinitum or do you have an ending for it?
And Dop... sadly yes it is possible, but it would be a miracle if she survived it.... My friend was 4, and there have been cases of babys.
Feedback on 'Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra' RP - gronath - 03-10-2008
' Wrote:It's supposed to be twisted. It's supposed to be pretty sick. That's the point. Read on. It get's better.
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' Wrote:...Maybe at least a warning would be at hand there, Vince. I think the sensible thing to do, since this has been pointed out is at least post one before with the very first thread and before those where that kind of subject is portrayed.
Aside form that, the writing style is just getting better.
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And Dop... sadly yes it is possible, but it would be a miracle if she survived it.... My friend was 4, and there have been cases of babys.
Quote:On a side note, there's a movie I'm particularly fond of called "Bliss". It's an adult movie, but very, very tasteful that goes on - among other things - about this.This story contains material that may be considered offensive, shocking or be qualified as adult content to some readers (murder, afterlife, sexual and domestic violence connotations and other not so cheerful things). Proceed reading it at your own discretion.
Feedback on 'Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra' RP - Vince Piccio - 03-11-2008
Good point, Renato. Added.
Feedback on 'Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra' RP - Jihadjoe - 03-21-2008
Liking the new posts, It all seems to be building up to something big.