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Feedback on 'Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra' RP - tfmachad - 06-12-2008
' Wrote:...Right now I'm enjoying very much (and I think I'm safe saying the same about Zapp) the creative process involved in coming up with this ongoing arc of story. Ever since we started, we have collaborated mostly during plan and editing. The first arcs' posts are very well marked by who wrote/posted them. In this ongoing arc we got more involved with each other's text in a more active way. We're even sharing the same scenes, with each one posting a complementing piece.
Are you going to go any further with the pre-death background of the two characters?
Next chapter should come out as a turning point and set a different pace than the one we've been following up since the beginning and we are looking forward to it. From then on, it's very likely that we need to turn back to the past for information, but at this point it's difficult to tell if we will be specifically visiting their pasts as living.
Anyway, I'd like to thank everyone that's been keeping up to this. Stay tuned!
((How did you guys like my impression of a big time TV writer?;)))
Feedback on 'Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra' RP - Dopamino - 06-12-2008
' Wrote:((How did you guys like my impression of a big time TV writer?;)))You had me fooled man:P
I think it would be interesting to have the ghosts get a bit more energetic. I know the point is for them to be acting out on the cold rage that they have, but can they get a bit more passionate and lively? Even if they don't need to dodge bullets, it'd at least add an intimidation factor to their attacks - though moving slowly and deliberately without any acknowledgement of the bullets is intimidating too.
I guess I'm saying mix things up a bit and pick up the pace every now and again.
Feedback on 'Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra' RP - tfmachad - 06-12-2008
' Wrote:...Well, I think there were some moments like that, but I must agree they were brief. One that comes to mind is Renato leaving his ship to go after the Bounty Hunter before he met Vince again. But I see your point and I agree with it. I'd say that we maybe seeing action like that very soon.
I think it would be interesting to have the ghosts get a bit more energetic. I know the point is for them to be acting out on the cold rage that they have, but can they get a bit more passionate and lively? Even if they don't need to dodge bullets, it'd at least add an intimidation factor to their attacks - though moving slowly and deliberately without any acknowledgement of the bullets is intimidating too.
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' Wrote:...Sure thing, you have a point there and I'll surely have that in mind. I'm also confident that the upcoming posts will please you.
I guess I'm saying mix things up a bit and pick up the pace every now and again.
Feedback on 'Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra' RP - Jihadjoe - 06-12-2008
Gronath... Your impersonation of a TV writer reminded me of a guy who actualy did that job so well done. Groups projects like this take a lot of co-ordination (as I am finding out) and patience and hard work. So Kudos to both of you.
Also... Zapp and Gronath in Sabres together... Not a force I would like to come up against.
Feedback on 'Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra' RP - tfmachad - 06-12-2008
' Wrote:Gronath... Your impersonation of a TV writer reminded me of a guy who actualy did that job so well done. Groups projects like this take a lot of co-ordination (as I am finding out) and patience and hard work. So Kudos to both of you.Eventually I'll leak the background story behind this partnership, it's funny.:)
' Wrote:Also... Zapp and Gronath in Sabres together... Not a force I would like to come up against.Nah, most likely I'll just tractor in after Zapp.
Feedback on 'Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra' RP - Vince Piccio - 06-13-2008
New post. And now... NOW, the terror truly begins....
MWAHAHAHAHA!
HAHA!
Seriously. We're going to start making Mon'Star look like a girl scout. This is the first in a series of posts that... took drawing on both our dark sides to write. Deep, dark. Super dark. Absence of light.
Feedback on 'Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra' RP - Radman89 - 07-06-2008
What to say...A great story post some more about Nomads if you can.
Best Regards
Feedback on 'Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra' RP - Zapp - 07-06-2008
What do you mean, more about Nomads?
Feedback on 'Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra' RP - Dopamino - 07-17-2008
"Come with me, corazon," they overheard as the soldier woman raised the girl from the floor."
"Come with me, heart"?:huh:
Feedback on 'Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra' RP - Zapp - 07-17-2008
OK people, some bad news... my mom's found my Word docs that I keep my stories on (:dry:), and she takes extreme exemption to this story, meaning she doesn't like the subject material (namely: afterlife). Now, to help address this I tacked on some more OOC to the beginning explaining that I don't, get this, believe anything I'm writing about, but I don't think that's gonna be enough.
I'm gonna try to keep writing this, but no promises.