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Feedback - Barrier - 12-23-2008
Please post feedback, it is my very first story.
http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?sh...mp;#entry450098
Feedback - Derkylos - 12-23-2008
If you put it in paragraphs, it would be much easier to read...
Feedback - GhostFace - 12-23-2008
Nice story, but I recommend splitting into paragraphs. If you can't figure out where to split it, take these simple hints
New paragraph at
1) New "scene"
2) New conversation
3) New event within a scene, like someone entered the room
4) Within a scene, split at conversations with and if there are more than 2 people in one scene
Hope those tips help out
Feedback - Barrier - 12-23-2008
really sorry guys, I'll do that soon
I had to finish it asap when I wrote it
EDIT: alright, it is now fixed