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Heraklion's Feedback - Heraklion - 12-13-2009
First of all, I hope you enjoy reading my stories as much as I enjoy writing them. I'll be happy to receive your comments and suggestions in here. :D
My stories:
The Heraklion
note: story about my corsair chars, stopped writing because I ran out of inspiration.
NO LONGER ACCURATE
The Chronicles of Adam
note: sequel on "The Heraklion" stopped writing after 2 chapters because I got bored with it
NO LONGER ACCURATE
The diary of Yuki Kaizoku
note: diary about inRP/ingame events
The diary of Shizuma Sakuragi
note: diary about inRP/ingame events
Emmanuelle Mimieux
note: biography of GRN pilot E. Mimieux
Chronicles of Sister Joanna
note: the life of someone who is more then she appears to be
Heraklion's Feedback - Heraklion - 01-01-2010
A new style:
Since my stories always looked like big walls of text. I decided to turn 180 degrees and change the style. Quotes are now seperated from regular text. And they are colored depending on who's talking. I also started to put in headers and i'm planning to work on some "ending eye candy" for every chapter.
Heraklion's Feedback - Carlos_Benitez - 01-01-2010
I've not read all of the story, but Chapter 18 looks pretty cool. I'll have to read the rest when I get a spare hour or so.
Heraklion's Feedback - aerelm - 01-13-2010
Well, you know I read your story, but just wanted to leave a note here that I do;)
New chapter was ... interesting, waiting to see how you continue this line in the next chapter.
Heraklion's Feedback - Heraklion - 01-13-2010
' Wrote:Well, you know I read your story, but just wanted to leave a note here that I do;)
New chapter was ... interesting, waiting to see how you continue this line in the next chapter.
Ye I know, don't be afraid to say it:PI'm losing it, that's what you get when you overdo it:(
1 more chapter and i'm up for a looooooong break.
Heraklion's Feedback - Hidamari - 06-22-2010
You know that its time to bring in the love right here dont you :ylove:must say, the ingame RP is always great and ive always enjoyed it.
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Kiriko -> Shizuma
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The Kiriko / Shizuma roleplay, its very very touching the way your character switches from killing spree mercenary to a caring and gentle mother when Kiriko is around.. always gives me a fuzzy warm feeling inside as I know this is what Kiriko also feels. she holds you in the closest effection and the fact that you have allowed my character to change so much of your character because of the way they interact just... brings tears to both our (kiri's too) eyes.
its a shame that this role play has been... sleeping, for a long time.
![[Image: Kiri.png]](http://i423.photobucket.com/albums/pp318/UnitXc/Kiri.png)
Kiri: Arigato.. okasama, for looking after me.. e..even though I cause you so much.. trouble.
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Leiko -> Yuki/Yuka
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Yuki/Yuka Kaizoku is a little different, this is mostly due to my own characters unwillingness to socialise with anybody else in the group, so I too feel alienated, dont get me wrong, this is required for me to act appropriatley towards everybody when playing as Leiko Shimizudani "Kaizoku|Shiro.Otonashi"
now Yuki is an enemy in love, and Kaito has broken her heart when it was just starting to heal leaves Leiko in a extremely difficult situation, she will no longer feel like coming back the tengoku at all, ever, doing her missions via mail, and sending reports back the same way.
she will become 3 times more isolated than ever before, and even less likley to ever speak to any human ever again, very interesting turn of events.
![[Image: Leikosmall.png]](http://i423.photobucket.com/albums/pp318/UnitXc/Leikosmall.png)
*Leiko turns off the radio, she frowns at it for a moment and then looks out of the cockpit silently into the greeny blue void*