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Feedback - Be gentle - Daerune - 12-30-2009
Feed back for Black Sun Armada
1. Yes I know my grammar is crud.
2. Yes I know my sentence structure also sucks
3. Yes I know My spelling blows
4. Yes That cookie is for me so leave it alone!1!
-zips up fireproof suit and starts to run around like a headless chicken-
Feedback - Be gentle - Contaan - 01-09-2010
Well its been a enjoyable read thus far! Interesting turn of events for Mr.Dangen.. anyhow keep at it! For sentence structure and grammer, may I suggest taking a look at other styles of work? Checking out how others write really helps if you're not sure you're doing it right. *Backs away from cookie*
Feedback - Be gentle - Jeremy Hunter - 03-06-2010
*also backs away from cookie*
Hey, at least I can follow your chris. Patterson's sentences are a jumbled mess, no offence if he reads this.