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Deep Blue Feedback Appreciated - darkgod - 04-28-2010
I have started the background and present story of the Character : Deep Blue
Any tips or hints would be appreciated
Should I continue this story or stop writing it?
Deep Blue Feedback Appreciated - Szerano - 04-28-2010
The first thing you should know is everyone has their own wirting style, you cannot say when it is perfect or when it is a total failur, but only becuase it never is perfect and never is a failure. With that out of the way I feel like this story is missing a main subject something that the character is talking about or referring to but this feeling didn't last long as I figured out you were jumping from your past and present talking about your history so for now that is good to go. Short, sweet and simple. This is great.
Deep Blue Feedback Appreciated - darkgod - 04-29-2010
Nice to hear it isn't a total failure.
If you do see some points that could use guiding be sure to point them out.
Deep Blue Feedback Appreciated - darkgod - 05-01-2010
More feedback would be Appreciated
Thank you.