Freja Von Traufen comments

[Saigo.Watanabe]

Story here

Constructive Criticism and praise only.

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"Time is too precious to be idle." - Saigo Watanabe
"Death is something that is inevitable, Something you cannot run away from." - Katharina Hildegard
Now going under the gaming name: Seraxia
www.twitter.com/Seraxia

[Primus Avatar]

You can actually feel the improvement with your writing skills.

good work! I hope you'll write more than 2 posts thou:P

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wassup

[MB52]

One day after a long days work of collecting and selling scrap metal she sat down in the bar and helped herself to a drink of the finest whisky on sale, then out of the blue, a rather tall bloke with black hair and a plaster on the left side of his face walked upto me and offered me a drink.

Not too bad, a few issues here and there but overall keep it up.

Now, here you went from 3rd person to 1st person in one sentence. =p

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I’ll carry this flag
To the grave if I must
Because it’s flag that I love
And a flag that I trust

[Saigo.Watanabe]

Heh i do the stories cause they are fun:P but thanks for that mb, ill fix it when i have the time:Dkeep the comments coming
Balt, trust me, i will be writing more, when i have the time, i need to progress with about 5 other stories aswell so fun fun fun fun fun!
oh and thanks for saying ive improved, means alot ^^

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"Time is too precious to be idle." - Saigo Watanabe
"Death is something that is inevitable, Something you cannot run away from." - Katharina Hildegard
Now going under the gaming name: Seraxia
www.twitter.com/Seraxia

[Saigo.Watanabe]

Let there be a BUMP

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"Time is too precious to be idle." - Saigo Watanabe
"Death is something that is inevitable, Something you cannot run away from." - Katharina Hildegard
Now going under the gaming name: Seraxia
www.twitter.com/Seraxia