Zapp's Never-Dying Feedback Thread

[AdamantineFist]

Awesome work, man. Truly awesome.

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[Zapp]

*gets out the BUMP stick and GRAVEDIGGER'S SHOVEL*

New story!

Light as a feather, Heavy as a mountain

Feedback appreciated.

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[Zapp]

Got a lot of new material, including...

Karly Richter

Esther Carson

Tamotsu Miyazaki

Eddy Looper

Comments are welcome, as well as how you liked the ending to the Zacarias Poncho trilogy.

Not 1 up (flood ftw)

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[sovereign]

Karly gets around more than people keep telling me Rose should. That, and you're a code-mongering foo. Does that help?

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[Horon]

This sucks. I was reading your Jason Moore story and I ran out of story parts to read. MAJOR bummer. MOAR! AYE WAHNT MOAR!

Jason Moore book FTW!

I think if you were to add an end somewhere, that would pass as an AWESOME Freelancer fanfic.

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While being quite funny, your sig was the biggest one i've ever seen so far. No more than 700x250 please. ~utrack
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[Laowai]

Hey Zapp

Just sat down and read the lot - all except the Jason moore one.

The Zacarius story is good, it gets you in, how it ties in with Carina is nicely done - my only downer? how you ended it! the Carina conflict could have been so much more fleshed out, there was a lot in that, and then you unceremoniously killed one of your main characters.... I liked the story up till that point; when i read it i could suppress an "awww man!?" All in all though, cool story. And i liked the mix in with Eppy's parts as well.

Light as a feather... nice idea, a mix of star trek voyager meets BSG meets freelancer, like to see where you take it, and its nice to see other forum members involved as well, it adds the the story. Will continue to watch it as it progresses


You posted four new ones - Esther, Karly, Eddy Tamotsu. Easy to read but i think really lack the detail and character development you put into your others, dont really get a feel for these people, some of the stories read as explanations for having codenames, which is fair enough, but a bit dry. - with the exception of Karly... an alcoholic ship captain who seems to sleep with all of her crew... including the 16 yr old helmsmen (begs the question how old is Karly? its a rare woman over 25 who'll go near a 16 yr old boy!). Interesting to see how dysfunctional that crew can become!:)

All in all, prolific stuff and good to read, keep it up! Enjoyed reading them all and ill continue to do so.

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[Zapp]

Karly gets around more than people keep telling me Rose should. That, and you're a code-mongering foo. Does that help?

Thanks Chris, that means a lot to me:P

This sucks. I was reading your Jason Moore story and I ran out of story parts to read. MAJOR bummer. MOAR! AYE WAHNT MOAR!

Jason Moore book FTW!

I think if you were to add an end somewhere, that would pass as an AWESOME Freelancer fanfic.

Its gonna end soon, and I like your thinking... Jason Moore book ftw!

Hey Zapp

Just sat down and read the lot - all except the Jason moore one.

The Zacarius story is good, it gets you in, how it ties in with Carina is nicely done - my only downer? how you ended it! the Carina conflict could have been so much more fleshed out, there was a lot in that, and then you unceremoniously killed one of your main characters.... I liked the story up till that point; when i read it i could suppress an "awww man!?" All in all though, cool story. And i liked the mix in with Eppy's parts as well.

Light as a feather... nice idea, a mix of star trek voyager meets BSG meets freelancer, like to see where you take it, and its nice to see other forum members involved as well, it adds the the story. Will continue to watch it as it progresses
You posted four new ones - Esther, Karly, Eddy Tamotsu. Easy to read but i think really lack the detail and character development you put into your others, dont really get a feel for these people, some of the stories read as explanations for having codenames, which is fair enough, but a bit dry. - with the exception of Karly... an alcoholic ship captain who seems to sleep with all of her crew... including the 16 yr old helmsmen (begs the question how old is Karly? its a rare woman over 25 who'll go near a 16 yr old boy!). Interesting to see how dysfunctional that crew can become!:)

All in all, prolific stuff and good to read, keep it up! Enjoyed reading them all and ill continue to do so.

First, thanks for reading (almost) everything, I need to get around to reading Greerson's story. I thought the ending was slightly poetic. Thanks, I actually did base it off Voyager (the best Trek, IMO) and BSG. I'm also hoping to flesh out the last 4 stories with ingame events (nothing scheduled), which is hard because Eddy.Looper is NC|Jester with 3 NCCs ingame:(Karly is in her mid-thirties, but keep in mind that theyre cooped up in a transport:P

Not 1 up, flood ftl

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[Zapp]

Links on the first post are fixed, I just copy/pasted the thread that the link that's normally in my sig points to. If that makes sense.

Not 1 up, flood ftl

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[Zapp]

Epic bumpzor.

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[Zapp]

GET OUT THE SHOVELS, ITS THAT TIME AGAIN!

Gravedug!

Got a new story, tell me whatcha think: Flickers

*waits around while no one comes by to say anything, per usual*

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