Hey man, again a nice attempt. Though, it's still not quite what I had in mind regarding the "hologram"-ish look of it ... It needs more transparency, and get rid of electric circuits in the background.
You're probably annoyed by me, so you don't have to work on it if you don't want to. I'd still appreciate it though.
Aaaand you nailed it! That's pretty much exactly what I was looking for. Would you mind making a End-Trans-Bar in the same style along with it ? Shouldn't be much, just something like "Ending Transmission" as text, same style as the opener.
Oh, and tell me how much you want for it, as well as a char name.