Please delete this post thank you

[Tachyon]

That... is hard to read. I'm usually not a grammar nazi but that opening message is not very inviting.

Also, critical information is missing. What ID/IFF are you using? What is your diplomacy with the various houses and unlawful factions. IE who do you shoot and who do you not shoot? Who do you trade with?

I totally agree, though english isn't my first language I can tell, that there are several commas missing in the main wall of text.
Also I agree with the critical information thing, I am not faction creation pro, but know reading some other posts in this forum will help getting you an idea on how much and different information you have to give:

- ID/IFF
- Tag
- Story of faction
- A sum up of basic information
- Rooster and optimally a rank structure
- Tech use ( ships, equioment, weapons )
- Diplomacy
- Trading and mining ops
and so on

And the name thing is awful, too, try to look around on these forums to see, if your name is taken or not.
And please, no walls of text...

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