Can you try making these variations: all of them as seperate experiments
the QCP logo takes up the hole space in its section: (here you left a little open space)
Instead of the Queen's Privateers, type, Queen Carina's Privateers
shire instead of train please
a more menacing font
it looks like you removed colors altogether, I dont think the sig needs to look like that, If you can somehow make a colorized background that can look good, while not being corporate, that would definitly be a boon
again, all of these points in a separate image as you have been doing thus far, sorry for the trouble
as a side note, aside from the 430 million (extra 30 is for the trouble thus far), how much would you charge for the psd/xcf file?