Suggestions for writing RP material

[Sabru]

Because my story features a few characters,

i put a list at the start with a bit of info about them and i color coded their speech to cut down on un-neccessary crap. I agree about your choice of color, its a bit too in-your-face. perhaps use a more subdued color for your text.

I also did some other stuff so there are no large text blocks.

Your two posts could be split down a bit into more posts to ease reading.

if you want to check out mine, heres the link: http://discoverygc.com/forums/showthread.php?tid=101218

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