ID Changes/Rework - Community Input requested

[Thunderer]

ID NAME: Bretonia Armed Forces ID
CURRENT ID TEXT:

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"Bretonia Armed Force ID

The Bretonian Armed Forces are the military of Bretonia. They maintain Bretonian rule in systems claimed by Bretonia and assist in law enforcement. They also patrol the systems bordering Bretonia. Bretonia is at war with Gallia.

The pilot carrying this lawful ID is a member of the Bretonia Armed Force who:

Is allowed to do the following anywhere:
-Can trade
-Can defend itself and ships of the same affiliation

Is allowed to do the following within their Zone of Influence:
-Can demand contraband and levy fines from any ship, then attack them if they refuse to comply. Ships in California are exempt from this
-Can attack ships which violate of Bretonia laws or belong to a house or organisation considered hostile by the Bretonian Crown
-Can defend allied or neutral ships and bases against anyone
-Can escort traders

Is not allowed to do the following:
-Cannot ally with unlawfuls or participate in unlawful actions
-Cannot use transports with more than 4,300 cargo

ZOI: Bretonia, systems directly bordering Bretonia, California
Allowed ships: Fighters, Freighters, Transports, Gunboats, Cruisers, Battleships"

PROPOSED CHANGES/ADDITIONS:

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Bretonia Armed Forces ID

The Bretonian Armed Forces are the military of Bretonia. They maintain Bretonian rule in systems claimed by Bretonia and assist in law enforcement. They also patrol the systems bordering Bretonia. Bretonia is at war with Gallia.

The pilot carrying this lawful ID is a member of the Bretonia Armed Forces who:

Is allowed to do the following anywhere:
-Can trade
-Can defend itself and ships of the same affiliation

Is allowed to do the following within their Zone of Influence:
-Can demand contraband and levy fines from any ship, then attack them if they refuse to comply. Ships in California are exempt from this
-Can attack ships which violate of Bretonia laws or belong to a house or organisation considered hostile by the Bretonian Crown
-Can defend allied or neutral ships and bases against anyone
-Can escort traders

Is not allowed to do the following:
-Cannot ally with unlawfuls or participate in unlawful actions
-Cannot use transports with more than 4,300 cargo

ZOI: Bretonia, systems directly bordering Bretonia, California
Allowed ships: Fighters, Freighters, Transports, Gunboats, Cruisers, Battleships"

JUSTIFICATION FOR CHANGES:

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The faction name is in plural. Just in case you intend to copy-paste things.