Mr.Fabulous' (leonardo_tigre) feedback thread

[Mr.Fabulous]

Here is where the details of the RP for various stories are placed..

The Way Of The Blood Dragon: an Indie RP (and other Kusari naval ranks)

The Way of the Blood Ronin: an indie RP
[click the link for the story]

I was hoping to make this BD| story before my hiatus, but because of IRL obligations pulling yours-truly from doing so and the state of the old BD| having kicked the bucket, yeah...

Constructive comments, especially on writing ability, narrative consistency, and potential plot holes, would be well-appreciated!

Ranks within the Kazushi Clan:

Kanji	Romaji	English
艦隊 総司令官	Sougou-Kantai Gensui //Sougou-Kantai omitted in less formal situations//	Combined-Fleet Marshal //Daimyo//
* 艦隊 大将	* Kantai Taishou //Kantai omitted in less formal situations//	* Fleet Admiral
* 中将	* Chuujou	* Vice Admiral
* 少将	* Shoushou	* Rear Admiral
* 准将	* Jyunshou	* Commadore
採掘 艦隊 大将	Saikutsu Kantai Taishou	Mining Fleet Admiral
防衛 艦隊 大将	Bouei Kantai Taishou	Defense Fleet Admiral
貨物 艦隊 大将	Kamotsu Kantai Taishou	Cargo Fleet Admiral
民間 艦隊 大将	Minkan Kantai Taishou	Civilian Fleet Admiral

^ I actually had to have reddit help me with the ranks: https://www.reddit.com/r/translator/comm..._japanese/