My first Music track

[Officially_that_Guy]

You gotta fix that link and make it clickable for all the lazies

Aaaaanyway. Listened to it, my verdict...kinda tired so I'll keep it short.

Disclaimer: I do not pull my punches on criticism. I do not hate the song, but there are several things I'd like to point out since you asked. I will give this another listen tomorrow to come up with a more "researched" reply.

DO NOT OPEN If your feelings are easily hurt

The bassline drops on beat 1 after introducing the snare for several seconds on beat 3, while the clap is on 2 and 4. Since you introduce the snare first and most prominently at the beginning, you might want to keep your emphasis on the 3rd beat. At 1:10 i caught myself stumbling over a beat more often than not, you seem to have inverted the emphasis there again, this time to the 1st beat i believe.

The bassline in the intro is introduced, then faded out again, only to be reintroduced later, also kinda throws it off in my opinion.

As for the melody - you are using many dissonances (the "randomized" high pitched artifacts), I am not entirely sure as to why - if you were to ask me how to "improve" it (i know, a very subjective matter), I'd say work with the dissonances for a short time and then resolve them into harmonies. Due to the constantly conflicting high artifacts, melody, mid level synth and bass, its just creating an unpleasant experience. Some of the tracks, currently not sure which, also seem to be skipping a beat in their own measures - they switch from one tone to another mid-beat.

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