[BG]- The Blackguard

[thisDerius]

1. What's the "Stormclaw banner"?
2. "Joker’s betrayal of humanity". Who's he? What did he do? What was Blackguard's connection to him? Where's Batman?
3. "was formed for the reason of eliminating the deep threats within the Sirius sector" That's extremely vague. What deep threats within Sirius?
4. Who is this "she" we keep reading about in your story?
5. "to look for the old Blackguard lores" on a distant planet in outer space? Where? The lore of BG is an ancient scroll? Besides, that's a one man job. It's not important for the faction info page.

As it is now, your faction background is very vague. It looks like you rushed for officialdom without putting effort behind this faction.

1. "Stormclaw Banner". What I meant here is that The Blackguard will be lead by Tia Stormclaw.
2. Joker is the ex-leader of the Blackguard who decided to turn to the Nomad side.
3. Deep threats of Sirius. The lore is talking about Order, Nomads, Core and so on, depending who they see as a threat.
4. "She" is the First Elite that is mentioned in the 3rd paragraph and I continued with the "she" on the 4th.
5. Old Blackguard lore. Data and Information on my past attempt on creating The Blackguard. I have erased most of it, but I am thinking of putting it there again.

Yes I have rushed a bit, but I am feeling lucky.

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