Gunboat Jericho

[Magoo!]

Suggestions from the *insert egotistical remark* ~ Master of Ameture Writing?:P
(It's funny I can't spell ameture... Or is that right? It doesn't look right...)

Anyways. So here's what I've got to say.

1 - Elaborate on where exactly they found it, how, and what they were doing at the time of the discovery.

2 - Have something exciting when they unseal the airlock to the entrance of the ship. A skeleton *insert closet*, weird technology (NOMADZ?!), I don't know, but something to build interest. Unless of course the door/cargo bay openy thingy was already busted open when they found it, but still make it exciting when they take it inside and explore the interior.

3 - I'd say use maybe four GB turrets and have the rest be normal. Like, a Purple Goddess type of normal; because they probably couldn't afford/acquire more military turrets. So half-gunned isn't necessary, just half-militarily gunned.

4 - Have a sort of timeline. If construction went slow, how slow? What did they do during that slow time (other than build it); in other words, what happened in their day-to-day lives on the way to and from work or what have you. Like, somebody found something in a land-fill. Or somebody's appartment was hit by an out of control Starflier (:P). Stuff like that.

Anywho, thats all I think. And since its a short background, obviously you're missing some (or alot) of details. But yep... Looks nice.