United Syndicates (Unioners/UN|) Feedback Thread

[Laz]

I can safely say I am never going to read this in it's current form. You seem to have forgotten to implement proper line breaks. I have a widescreen monitor and these walls of text are just an eye sore - god knows how someone with a smaller resolution is viewing this. If you want other people to read I would suggest splitting these chunks into smaller sections of three-five paragraphs long; depending on the size.

Example

This:

The Unioners finance themselves, outside of the aggressive piracy and theft they're notorious for, by dominating Liberty-Rheinland Diamond smuggling - they run said Diamonds from Kreuzberg to Dawson, occasionally even further. The Xenos have been trying to encroach on Unioner routes for years and years, without any success to speak of. The Unioners have come into frequent shadow conflict with the Red Hessians over Diamond supremacy throughout the years - their relations, whilst historically strong due to Unioner assistance to the Hessians in their founding years, has always been a precarious one at best due to the extreme political differences between them, and occasional Unioner incursions into Dresden to pilfer Diamonds off the books has been met by savage Hessian attack. Most of the time, however, the Hessians tolerate the Unioners for the trade, shipbuilding prowess and logistical competence they provide, whilst the Unioners avoid antagonising the Hessians overtly out of fear of attracting Hessian firepower and antagonising their cosmic neighbours, the LWB.
Though the Unioners remain dominant in the eastern Independent Worlds smuggling trade, they do so with caution; preferring not to antagonise the local Liberty Rogues or to draw attention to their divergences from the Coalition narrative of the Rheinland Popular Revolution. Unioner provisions are primarily pilfered off of trade convoys (as always, preferably those of Republican) throughout their zone of influence, although Kreuzberg in New Berlin is a reliable supplier of H-Fuel and Side Arms. The Unioners also put their hereditary ship-building skills to work for them, producing Basic Alloys and maintaining ships of factions Sirius wide. Much of the Unioners imported income comes from the fabrication of ships for foreign agencies (even if they are despised). It is generally accepted that if you can give the Unioners a ship design, something that they desire, and the materials to build it with, they will build you anything.

To this:

The Unioners finance themselves, outside of the aggressive piracy and theft they're notorious for, by dominating Liberty-Rheinland Diamond smuggling - they run said Diamonds from Kreuzberg to Dawson, occasionally even further. The Xenos have been trying to encroach on Unioner routes for years and years, without any success to speak of.

The Unioners have come into frequent shadow conflict with the Red Hessians over Diamond supremacy throughout the years - their relations, whilst historically strong due to Unioner assistance to the Hessians in their founding years, has always been a precarious one at best due to the extreme political differences between them, and occasional Unioner incursions into Dresden to pilfer Diamonds off the books has been met by savage Hessian attack.

Most of the time, however, the Hessians tolerate the Unioners for the trade, shipbuilding prowess and logistical competence they provide, whilst the Unioners avoid antagonising the Hessians overtly out of fear of attracting Hessian firepower and antagonising their cosmic neighbours, the LWB.

Though the Unioners remain dominant in the eastern Independent Worlds smuggling trade, they do so with caution; preferring not to antagonise the local Liberty Rogues or to draw attention to their divergences from the Coalition narrative of the Rheinland Popular Revolution. Unioner provisions are primarily pilfered off of trade convoys (as always, preferably those of Republican) throughout their zone of influence, although Kreuzberg in New Berlin is a reliable supplier of H-Fuel and Side Arms.

The Unioners also put their hereditary ship-building skills to work for them, producing Basic Alloys and maintaining ships of factions Sirius wide. Much of the Unioners imported income comes from the fabrication of ships for foreign agencies (even if they are despised). It is generally accepted that if you can give the Unioners a ship design, something that they desire, and the materials to build it with, they will build you anything.

I do not know what resolution you are running, but I assume from this it must be 4000 wide.

This is still just as applicable. Please add some line breaks to most your sections. I'm running a 1920 width monitor and some of these are 10-12 lines long. I feel sorry for anyone running at a 1280, or god forbid less.

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