A few days ago a member of the Liberty Government asked me for help in rewriting their laws, and since I've asked this to be done on numerous occasions, I went ahead and did it with goals similar to the Rule Rewrite.
Goals:
- make laws faster and easier to learn for new people
- make things easier to find for everyone
- make them less confusing by putting parts that belong together together
- make them more aesthetically pleasing, better organized, and less annoying to read in order to give a better impression of discovery
- make them short enough to put into infocards on the server, similarly to the Help System
I started by cleaning up the index page of the Laws of Sirius and making a first proposal for the Laws of Liberty. That proposal can be made even shorter if some things I wasnt sure about yet will also be implemented (see the post after this one).
Currently, some examples of size of laws in terms of word count are:
Liberty 3238 (proposal reduces to 1801 or less)
Bretonia 2978
Gallia 1147
Rheinland 3216
Corsairs 1963
Kusari 2142
Crayter 1997
Order 729
I think it should be possible to reduce the number of words in each house law collection to 1500 words of less, even if that requires some smaller law changes (there are none in my proposal so far, unless I misunderstood some laws).
Please point out any problems/mistakes you find, suggest improvements, ask questions, or give other feedback.
It's recommended to open the current (linked) and proposed laws side by side in 2 browser windows for direct comparison.
Problems:
- too much text to serve as an effective table of contents
- small print is irrelevant for people reading the laws, only relevant for those writing them
- "A codex listing the laws and regulations applicable to" is repeated 14 times and yields 0 information
- font and colors together with the fact makes people read and average of 3 words like "The Republic of" before they get to the word that lets them find what they were looking for in every line
