Story Reviews

[Ash]

Remnants of a Daydream
by @Wulthus , @axisdeus, @ddogg, @"Caitlyn Cross" and @TAVIA

After reading this story, one thing is clear: the writers are clearly invested in it's characters and enthused by it's elements. The sentiment attached to certain characters, ships or locations is indicative of that and really comes through in the literature. But this raw enthusiasm doesn't really translate well into a conducive story that conveys the reader. Often I found myself lost in the perspectives of the characters without knowing anything about the characters themselves. This actually works well in the prologue where lack of context provokes the reader to press on to find out more about the characters. But the minimalist style persists long into the body of the story, leaving me somewhat bewildered. I expect the writer is well aware of what the underlying story is meant to be and is keeping it under wraps so as to gradually reveal it to the reader. But the resultant effect leaves one feeling completely untethered and a sense that you're missing the point. Changing the perspective to a new character in a new setting with every episode is a style that makes for an interesting convergence-style story, but can be very difficult to pull off well. This is made even more difficult in a collaborative piece. So I applaud the writers for attempting it. But the effect of it here only seems to add to the confusion. That being said, the format of the literature, pictorial content and variety in settings are a delight. If the writers are willing to temper their vivid imaginations with a more direct writing style, i'm sure that we'll see some really fantastic literature come to light in the near future.

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