Teide / Reasoner feedback

[Fab]

I personally like the story better than a generic "it was stolen from a scrap field" "we used a stable wormhole to cross the sector"

something I think should be focused on a little more is the characters/vessels feelings regarding the loss of their home. But I do find it reasonable that when faced with destruction at the hands of Liberty they would choose to flee to maintain their "freedom" even at the expense of falling in with another group. Maybe also a focus on their "otherness" compared to the Corsairs, or is the Captain a secret love child between a Corsair and a Liberty? I feel that something needs to be said as to why the corsairs were chosen over other groups in the sector. Especially in light of a crew of 100-200 that would also need to be in agreement with this. (or is the Captain keeping them in line with threats of death?)

Thank you for your feedback. I already have things planned to unravel the intricacies of the story. stay tuned for those!

---

ARES / Faction Information / Feedback