(07-20-2024, 11:47 AM)Haste Wrote: If you want honest feedback, it would really help to actually put some meaningful, gameplay/lore/Freelancer-related information in there. It still reads like soulless, meaningless ChatGPT-generated drivel. The typical ChatGPT bullet point list isn't really helping, but:
Quote:Safety
All staff members receive safety training to make sure they understand and can properly execute our safety procedures. This training is consistently refreshed to integrate the safety regulations and techniques.
Wow! That's so cool! I bet your stock would go up by 0.27% at the very least reading this amazing blurb. But what does this mean in the game universe? Could you elaborate? What safety procedures?
I don't know if the nonsense about "abiding by laws" (What laws? You're Zoners in the Omicrons? The Order's laws? The Core? Which ones?) and "sustainability principles" (Are you worried about polluting Omicron Delta? Could you elaborate on this? Is this epic Gaian roleplay?) or whatever is still in some of your infopages, but it all has just come across as utterly lazy. I have yet to be convinced a human being was even involved in the writing of most of the supposed lore of this faction.
I took Tunicle's advice and added a bit of flavor to what Orex does, which is mainly like it says on the info page - Iridium extraction. Sure, it is a bit vague when it comes to safety procedures, but I believe that going into very detail about that is simply unnecessary.
The bullet point is but a simple formatting thing that adds to the aesthetic of the info page. The information provided in that bullet point narrows down how things are done within the company.
(07-20-2024, 11:47 AM)Haste Wrote: You copy-pasted some text twice here - perhaps from a ChatGPT thread, but I wouldn't make such baseless accusations - and it's still in post-edit:
Quote:Orex Industries owes its existence to two extraordinary founders who combined their passion for innovation, entrepreneurship, and humanitarianism: Orex Industries owes its existence to two extraordinary founders who combined their passion for innovation, entrepreneurship, and humanitarianism:
That was just a bbcode formatting mistake, as I was editing the page in another tab and then copy-pasted it onto a different tab, I didn't realize that I didn't delete the copy.
(07-20-2024, 11:47 AM)Haste Wrote: Let's put it this way. If you don't care at all about your faction's lore and it apparently all just boils down to "We mine Iridium, here's some Lorem Ipsum about how we do it", why should anyone else care? And if nobody cares, why do you want to be official?
If I didn't care about it I wouldn't try to go Official nor would I meddle with the info page and other RP, I would just mine Iridium. So yeah, I do care, hence why I'm looking for feedback. And to be perfectly frank with you Haste, the very reason why we got denied the first time and why it took you guys almost a whole month to respond to our request is simply because you had to nitpick everything and come up with some bullshit that would justify our denial, to which I went along with, I took the L, but that's beside the point. The point is that I very much care and am doing my best to write RP, come up with an interesting info page, and give create something for my members to do.
So if you have any suggestions on what gameplay/FL lore would be a good addition to this, I'm all ears.
