ExoCore Initiative Feedback

[Guthixibis]

I concur with all of the feedback above. Specifically in regards to fleshing out your faction.

I think the infopage is in for a rewrite in regards to the origins. For example, some of your founders are from "Bretonia's institute" and "Rheinland's Daumann Division". As someone who's been around to read too many infocards, I would automatically know that the former is referring to Cambridge Research Institute, but new players may not. For the latter, it should be "the Daumann Corporation". I think you could really do with going through and writing up a definite origin to at least explain why all these corporations who are competitors at least in part decided to partake in a joint venture.

I also agree with Lyth's above implication that this faction may be better off on one of the non-generic Edge World-native ID's. There's nothing against yet another freelancer research group - they've been around since the start of things - but you might at the very least want to establish a general theme beyond "black market technology inventors". I would suggest the Junkers as a good replacement, as they're noted to do the dirty work for various house organizations and have an inventive streak, while having the relevant ID lines.

At the very least I think a name change would be good to distinguish yourselves from "The Core" which do many of the same things, in the same area, and will probably see you as a competitor worth shooting.

Happy flying.