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[Laowai]

Threatening me with George Bush just makes me want to antagonise you..... I am not afraid of the Monkey President..;)


Anyway, the story is not bad - Your characters could use some more depth, who are they? why do they do the things they do? Why did Gneisenau gun down the farmer, ignoring his pleas of "having a family" but then used the same line on the rogues when he met them near buffalo. Thats just my opinion though - i just like to know more about the people....
Gneisenau so far is not really a likeable fellow - though if you're setting him up to be a cold hearted killer i guess that's the point!:).

A few little spelling things there.. but meh its fine.... i've actually seen your character online before.. now i know more about him....

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