Feedback for my stories

[Laowai]

They are both good - the first one with the drifting order pilot especially, good amount of detail too which i like:)- You've left enough questions and "whys?" there to get me to want to read the next part!

The second one is good too but i do have questions on it - are the two "Anthonys" from the stories the same guy? That was a little confusing reading them back to back - also, the dialogue between them is good but it seems to jump - has he been missing for three years? why has he not contacted his family? they seem to just jump straight into it without the first brother asking the million questions that he must have about "where the hell have you been and why haven't you contacted us? we thought you were dead you bast**d!"

Good stuff, ill read more when you put it up!

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