' Wrote:I am the main Admiral, and Adict is one of the Vice-Admirals.
but if there are only two of you at the moment, how can he be ONE of the vice-admirals? or are there more of you, hidden in the shadows, waiting to pounce on unsuspecting victims who are unbeknowingly cruising towards their sudden and painful deaths.... sorry.
Suggestions:
1. Presentation. Currently the RP is a wall of text. break it up a bit to make it easier on the eye
2. Graphics. oooh pretty pictures! they break up the text and are worth a 1000 words, apparently. we used cave paintings to describe how to hunt long before we had word processors.
3. Finish it! If you're serious about leading a faction, then get it all together; the diplomacy, the ship + equipt lists, and the roster. If you need players, go recruiting, see who is interested. If you just want feedback on the story, post it in stories with a linky to a feedback thread.
