Feedback time! (can you guess for which story?!)

[tazuras]

The stories pretty good, it really added some flavor to slavers and Kusari for me.

I really enjoyed the characters, although Saito is pretty cliche, but that's ok.

Umm, they still have shotguns in this time period? That collar doesn't sound terribly reliable either, a piece of gauze could disarm it. I did like the rustic flavor it added though, not everything needs to be high tech or futuristic.

The only major critique I have is more detailed descriptions would be great, painting more of an image of the setting. I rather need to work on this myself sometimes and you accomplished it very well in some places, like the slave pit. The inside of the HMQ could have been better described, perhaps the market as well, although I could picture that easily based on that nice little detail about hard credits.

Overall though, very good.

Now read my LPR stuff!:P

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