My initial impression regarding this is that it's all over the place. You got tid bits of story being thrown in just to cover various factions, rather than having more justified reasons. Also, I think that a government such as Gallia would be ALOT more open about it's intentions to just cluster-rape everyone, especially if its racially charged.
My big question is, that will probably be answered in the continuation, what happens to the Zoners? Also, Since the message is declared across Sirius, what will Liberty's/rest of Sirius factions responses be?
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