Armageddon Story feedback thread

[Armageddon]

Now i don't normally post stories on the boards. I find that it is long and time consuming. But with me having the time to do so for a while i thought i would give it a shot and see how it goes.

So far i only have one which is going to be based on my new freelancer character RapidFire ingame, but if people like this one i may begin writing stories for some of my other characters.

The Journey of RapidFire

So that kicks me off feel free to post negative feedback as this is my first serious story I am extremely intrested to see what people make of it. I am wishing to improve as I go through writing these.

Anyways i hope that the people who care to read like and if not please tell me why so i can improve it.