Cryer Pharmaceuticals

[jammi]

Right, I can't actually comment on your ingame, seeing as I've never encountered any of you. Spend more time in Leeds and I'm sure that'll change. What I will do is comment on your write-up.

Well, faction status pages are like an arms race - the longest, the most well written, the most visually pleasing. So far as this write-up goes it has everything needed, plus some. You've tonnes of information here that really helps give a good insight as to what the group is really about. And the best thing is it doesn't give a one-dimensional view - Cryer's shady side is nicely represented too!

In this arms race, however, this isn't a sleek looking fighter-jet. It's something with far more wires and pipes exposed. A little messy. That could be changed with some formatting. Bold and underline section titles, then increase the font size. maybe look into varying the colours on different parts to draw the eye and keep people's attention.

Some people find that blending images into the posts can work to great effect as well.

And I absolutely love the reward and corporate ladder system. The Slavers Union works in a similar fashion with the allotment point system, which is used to buy new ships, equipment or take out loans. Some of the rewards are hilarious as well - I especially like the Yacht reward for snubbing poor people.

So long as your ingame corresponds accurately to what's written here, I can't fault you. Just remember to stick to and raise the high standards you've set yourself here.

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