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[abbamouse]

Your RP is OK, but it seems incomplete. "Sell Cardi to Manhattan" seems like a pretty uninteresting (and almost nonsensical) goal for a faction. Surely that is a means to some other end -- making money, spreading addiction, some strange thing to do with Nomads, sticking it to "the man," etc. Why the fetish for this particular commodity? If you know the characters' underlying motivations for their behavior, I suspect you will find even more RP opportunities.

For example, you sound a bit like a street gang of sorts (like many pirate factions). How do you intend to seize some "turf" for your group? The Lane Hacker connection is strained -- would they really like this group operating from their bases? Do you represent competition with other local gangs? There are more RP opportunities here as well.

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I go by abbamouse, but my characters are the Cryer researcher Daniel Moss, the very boring and ordinary trader John Smith, the borderline-insane civilian Mr Joker, and a Bundschuh activist who goes by the alias Rosa Luxemburg. I am not them and they are not me.