From what I've seen in-game, you guys are great. Pretty good RP, and you're going about everything in exactly the right way. Spent a good deal of time flying with you guys, and I've even given you permission to help patrol Vespucci, so there you go. Very good in-game.
As for this... the "others" in the allowed ships for the High Overlord isn't very specific. Does this mean I can expect to see the High Overlord flying around in a Geb? I doubt it, but it really needs to be addressed.
And who's this "lead intel officer" who allows prison liners for the Taskmaster? You never mentioned that rank anywhere else. Give more detail than the fact that Alexa Novak is the current one.
I noticed ZAS specifically part of the "Other Zoners" group and thus neutral. This could prove problematic, as they're anti-slavers. CR also seems to have been neglected, and thus neutral. And "Certain frowned-upon individuals" is just about as specific as the "others" above.
Overall, more detail! Tons more detail. Detail is king. And make it longer. I don't feel like I'm getting enough information here. Put in every single bit of information and detail you possibly reasonably can. This still needs a bit of work, but it looks good.
