Valorian

[Barrier]

I gotta say, if this is your first time, you did great. I liked the part about Gallia and Liberty texting around :laugh:

:)Pros: The Valorian is a great name in my opinion.___ I like the idea of using PEOPLE for fuel. (H-Fuel = Human Fuel huh? :lol:)___ You portrait Gallians as people with care.___ Good job on thinking of new technology.

:(Cons: I think you should've at least dropped a hint to where the ship disappeared to the reader before Gallia "found" it. (that's what I think is missing from your story - readers don't know what happened to the ship or the new captain)___ I don't think battleships can comfortably operate inside the debris fields (too large).___ I think you should've talked about the Liberty developing weapons to scare Rheinland earlier in the story.___ The Junkers wouldn't be so helpful, unless they got a really good profit out of the deal.