The Queen's Demise, Feedback thread

[Zeltak]

Oh my god it sucked so bad, where did you learn to write? Even I, an idiot can write better!

Nah, it was pretty good, I enjoyed the dark humor and the evil atmosphere just remember to keep your character unique and don't always do the typical "evil/psycho/maniac" moves. Keep thinking outside the box. Can your characters emotions change her typical actions? It does so with normal human beings. Can certain conditions in a situation affect how she would react normally? Point being, keep her dark and evil just don't present her in a way that I can almost guess what she is gonna do next, that's when it becomes uninteresting.

Good luck on the story!

Also, one more thing, I like pie.