Firstly, well done on the structure of your post and the ease with which it can be read.
Now onto the rest.
Quote: In 817 AS, a large strike took place on Red Deer Station. The LPI personnel was dissatisfied with working conditions and wages decrease. Caine offered them and alternative and almost half of the station, mostly the young LPI officers and other workers followed his advice. They became rogues and before the navy came to the station, they were gone.
Quote:They managed to make them to listen to their story and won a worthy friend. The rogues took them to Freeport 14, in Yukon and even offered help in fixing their ships.
Quote: the Liberty Rogues decided to maintain their friendship and offered Caine docking rights on Fort McMurray
Quote:They soon started negotiations with the Lane Hackers and obtained docking rights on Cochrane Depot. Also, the rogues offered them ships and equipment.
Quote:Now, IRA is growing bigger day by day, fighting the Liberty Navy and the LSF and winning.
Those are a few points in your story that either are too presumptuous or downright power-gaming. Either way, they will all need to be addressed somewhat. Namely the Rogues and Lane Hackers (Maybe ask them for their ships first, since they decide if you can have them or not) and the point about winning against the Navy.
You are 1 cruiser, 1 repair ship and a few fighters. How can that stand up against even a small sized Navy battlegroup?
Something very important too is the sudden appearance of this.
You can't go from the 23rd of June with no ships and no history and then expect an entire empire appearing at your feet on the 24th.
If you want I could write about how the LSF chased you down and obliterated you all in Ellesmere?
It would be just like what you have done here.
Roleplay each step.
Do the LSF cruiser thing in Alaska on the server.
Then the move to Alberta etc.
Then, working for a few months or more at it, get that magical 'support of the masses' somehow.
Without simply saying "I have this and that and that's it!".
You can't simply write down that you have all of this and expect to suddenly get it.
You need to work for it.
EDIT: Ninja's are everywhere.
Just to re-iterate, IRA is a very very poor choice of tag.
