Akira's Biography feedback

[Crusader4]

Thanks everyone :)
I was writing all..... (theres an expression just
can't remember it atm)
Im glad you liked it, considering i wrote it in about 5 minutes,
no wonder its so shallow and with no emotions xD
I'll give it a shoot,
but i will need to think about the story first. ;)

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