I will do that, may take me a bit to consider the wording as best as I can. Looking back I know I had something definate in mind but most of that was lost to me. I am thinking along the lines where section 10 was writen, having an additional part stating something along the idea that if RP is in progress that the Bounty Hunter/Freelancer should make a bit more than the 'minimum' effort to become involved in that RP and then make it known their reason and purpose. While we all know this is a game, consider how things might progress real time. Certain players/factions involved in the RP with a 'criminal' should preclude another player from attempting to collect a bounty openly in front of them, ie House Police/Military.
Think of it this way, if a Police officer were questioning a 'suspect' and some Bounty Hunter comes along and tries to collect a bounty on that 'suspect' the Police Officer would step in and prevent that since the 'suspect' is under the Officers custody until either arrested or released depending on the nature of the questioning and so on...
Looking back at where I pointed out section 8, I am having to rethink that a bit. That part puts a lot of the burden of proof on the "employer" and also makes the persons who want to collect bounties also responsible for showing their rep properly. I am having less a problem with that part than I originally did when I first read it.
Still, I think a bit...more...could be added or tweaked that would improve upon or at least give both sides a chance to have better RP in my opinion.
