Eppy's Pet Project Mk II

[bluntpencil2001]

Well, to be honest, whilst I'm not a fan of the story, being against the extended-intro canon, I'll play along, since you do seem to be working hard at this.

My main problem is why it needs to be an Outcast faction. The base idea screams 'Order' to me, really. Also, it seems to be proposing an additional House on rather shaky grounds.

Also, if Outcast, you may be trying to make them seem 'the good guys' too much. Whilst the Outcasts have their good side... they have to retain some questionable morality. All of the factions, save the Order, are bad in some respect, and this shouldn't really be hidden (props go to RM's leadership here for being 'space nazis'). Those that aren't bad in some way, such as maybe the Bretonian Police, don't really have many 'good' qualities about them either... they're just regular guys doing their job.

So... all in all, whilst there's nothing that sticks out as horrible about it, I must say that it isnt to my own, personal, taste (which counts for nothing, I know) and it also seems to be too ambitious.

There seems to be a lot of factions that want to claim that they saved the universe off-screen. It makes all the little wars in-game appear to count for nothing, making player achievements seem worthless.

Don't take this the wrong way, but it feels kind of wrong when one of your characters has fought tooth-and-nail in-game to be recognised as a war-hero, then something out of the blue has retroactively saved the galaxy from imminent destruction. Makes flying your little fighter seem pointless, really.

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