Fletcher & Co. Roleplay Help and Feedback Request Thread

[Fletcher]

Mmmm....if you have time, I would like some feedback on my Co-op story Tidings of Light


http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=25175

So far, only Seth gave any feedback, and since then I have brought my character into the game, RPing with the LN, the Keepers, etc.

Thanks

Story reviewed and touched up, check the inbox. ;)

EDIT: Sorry for multi posting.

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"Oh chuffing blimey, another day, another person being whiney!"
Fletcher's Feedback and Stories Thread

[Fletcher]

I'd love feedback on Broken Skies.

http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?sh...c=23814&hl=

I'm fairly certain it needs no editing, but feedback would be nice.

Read the story, I sent the feedback to you.

Ding ding ding I like this story, kind of sounds like a typical love story in the making though. Need to find someway to stray it from that direction, unless thats what your gunning for.

Still this is a very well written and well presented story, I enjoyed reading it and any story that does that gets a thumbs up from me.

I did spot some errors :unsure: I don't think it needs correcting unless the grammar Nazi's come ringing. :wacko:

I hope you pick the story up again soon, I like it.

**Again sorry for multi-posting, that's all the work I'm doing today, now to play FL!**

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"Oh chuffing blimey, another day, another person being whiney!"
Fletcher's Feedback and Stories Thread

[Orin]

Love story.. <evil laugh>

They have no idea...;)

[Zygoeths]

As did I, Hey btw, I'm doing names, give me some ideas for a name you want, i'll put it together and come up with something

[Daerune]

**Again sorry for multi-posting, that's all the work I'm doing today, now to play FL!**

HES NOMAD KEEL EM!

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[Zygoeths]

HES NOMAD KEEL EM!

Now i know i spam, but.... wow

[Fletcher]

Check your inbox Boba Fett. I read and reviewed it, and touched up some parts fro grammar and the like.

Grammar Nazi in my brain is killing me, can someone launch a D-Day in my brain already!?:lol:

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Fletcher's Feedback and Stories Thread

[Dra1003]

heh thanks man


im not crazy about grammer and tend to miss things when writeing anything longer then 7 sentences..:x

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Ive had enough of disco for now. I might be back at the next mod release.

The Master of all things cyborg

Bio Extensive Research

[Mike_Fire]

Thank you Fletcher for the help.
I will continue the work and will add some more background in the holes. I have some ideas for it.

Thank you too Zygoeths. I have been thinkin' this idea for cyborg. Get captured by hackers or other faction and get reprogrammed to kill the authority in liberty sounds really fun. I would change name of the robot. I will call him Tueurborg. (Tueur=killer) Also he would carry a merc ID with IFF from the faction he got captured. Or maybe IFF neutral. The ship will, in that case of neutral, not be a ship of the faction. But I'm Not sure yet.

[Dra1003]

<strike>fletcher sent you a pm reguarding one more story i want you to look at if you want to and have time.</strike>

NOTE: Its one of the longest storys ive written just a warning. And no im not in the harvester faction

edit: opps i didnt realise 3 other people are willing to help sorry for the sorta unessesary pm flect heres the story if anyone is interested in reading it. http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?sh...c=23799&hl=

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Ive had enough of disco for now. I might be back at the next mod release.

The Master of all things cyborg

Bio Extensive Research