Suggestions for writing RP material

[Calmodulin]

Heya!

I have really taken a liking to writing about my character's encounters.
My attempts so far can be found here: http://discoverygc.com/forums/showthread.php?tid=101090

What I have noticed though is that I have a bit of a difficulty reading it afterwards. Maybe it's the size, maybe it's the font, may just be because it's a wall of text (although I try to split it up) but it is quite tiring to do so. Maybe it's my eyes, too

So, the topic of discussion is:
What can someone do to their RP posts (containing literature) to make them easier on the eye? (eg. Larger/Different font, coloring)

(If there has been a similar post before, please link to it )

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[Hone]

Maybe shorter posts, and a less "in your face" font. But generally just practise untill you feel it comes out right. Also make sure its about something interesting, that always makes a better read! ;P

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[Marburg]

Like Hone said, shorten your posts. If you have to break up one 2 minute scene in your head into 20+ bite-sized posts, DO IT!!

It not only helps with attempting to maintain the sucky attention span of gamers in general, it also helps weed out the things you really wanna say vs. the extraneous crap that's in your head that doesn't actually need to be written.

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[Sabru]

Because my story features a few characters,

i put a list at the start with a bit of info about them and i color coded their speech to cut down on un-neccessary crap. I agree about your choice of color, its a bit too in-your-face. perhaps use a more subdued color for your text.

I also did some other stuff so there are no large text blocks.

Your two posts could be split down a bit into more posts to ease reading.

if you want to check out mine, heres the link: http://discoverygc.com/forums/showthread.php?tid=101218

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[Remilia Scarlet]

Paragraphs are cool. Use pictures, pictures are always cool too.

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[Sirius.Kane]

I don't really think practice makes perfect, but try reading a few books, maybe replay a few game or watch movie and focus on the story

[Narcotic]

Had a good laugh on your sig.

What was the topic? Ah yes. I'd suggest you to make them look nice. So people will in the first place be positively attracted to it and might possibly even consider reading it. Use fitting fonts/colors, add pictures. Have them written in logs, dialogues, letters, videos, audio logs -whatever.

Be creative.

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[Calmodulin]

Thanks for the advice folks!
Summing up:
The large font on the first post was indeed not a very good idea.
Using pictures is advisable.
Breaking the text to several posts is good too.

The last part is something I could use some clarification about.
In which parts of the action should I split it?
I'd be very grateful if you gave me an example with my RP with Max Cayne so far, or an example out of your own stories would be good too.
I was thinking maybe recreate the event from different accounts, each one being in a different post.
eg. I could stop writing from Cayne's side when he met the Reaver on the second post, and start writing it as the Reaver himself. And the Retribution's intervention can be explained from the Captain's point of view, and Cayne's retrieval from the Junkers.
So that one singular post turns into 4-5 different ones.
What other writing device can help break it up?
Something like that?

Edit: I can't help but notice that gifs are quite a fad on the interwebz these days, couldn't help myself Narcotic ^_^

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[Sabru]

sorry for somewhat jacking your thread,

but why arent people giving feedback in the feedback sub forum?

* Sabru is hungry for feedback

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[Manticore]

I like the changes from the first post to the second. A couple more small suggestions for you.

1. As has been said above, pictures can help. Maybe you can frame each vignette with a small pic on the top? Something like a picture of the character or a small, cropped screenshot can help draw a reader in. (I should do this more often myself.)

2. Use that enter key a lot. For example, a bit from your second post:

Carnelian, or whatever his designation is, noticed the attention he received and disrupted the trade lane about halfway, so that what seemed like perfect prey had nowhere to run.
"A Reaper. Never went toe to toe with one of your kind before." Max said, staring down the guns of his opponent's Sabre.
"The LPI. Right where I want them too. Don't sweat it, cops like you who take me on don't live to speak about it.", a rather young voice with a Bretonian accent replied.
"Spare me the small talk. You want a showdown, son? You got it." he said.

Would look a lot better if you hit enter again after each line of dialog.

Carnelian, or whatever his designation is, noticed the attention he received and disrupted the trade lane about halfway, so that what seemed like perfect prey had nowhere to run.

"A Reaper. Never went toe to toe with one of your kind before." Max said, staring down the guns of his opponent's Sabre.

"The LPI. Right where I want them too. Don't sweat it, cops like you who take me on don't live to speak about it.", a rather young voice with a Bretonian accent replied.

"Spare me the small talk. You want a showdown, son? You got it." he said.

Even with the colors, this will help the reader figure out who is speaking and when the dialog shifts to someone else.

Overall, I think you're doing great, and I like your writing style!

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