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Shiki · 03-03-2018, 10:04 PM,

https://discoverygc.com/forums/showthrea...pid1976739

Why are you doing this? It's my personal story.

Backo · 03-03-2018, 10:05 PM,

(03-03-2018, 10:04 PM)Shikizumi Wrote: https://discoverygc.com/forums/showthrea...pid1976739

Why are you doing this? It's my personal story.

This isn't Eliza Valdez feedback. This is Backo feedback. Please use the appropriate thread.

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Yaoquizque · 04-29-2018, 12:23 PM,

Hey.
I'm taking this opportunity too praise your role-play that is 99% of the time fun read.

Chin up folk.

Yaoquizque · 04-29-2018, 12:25 PM,

But I won't forgive you for Akohep.

Backo · 04-29-2018, 01:47 PM,

(04-29-2018, 12:25 PM)Yaoquizque Wrote: But I won't forgive you for Akohep.

I won't forgive myself for Akohep either. Sad

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Kaze · (This post was last modified: 07-17-2018, 11:57 AM by Kaze.)

Right. Time to drop my funsy side and be serious.

Your writing with Valdez had a marked improvement over the time, something that was fine tuned no doubt as the character grew. Sure it has its light moments, that everyone loves, but also serious ones. One can truly see that the 'Valdez joi de vivre" does fade when she deals with the cheating by Loyola or life does not go her way. I actually feel the sadness taking place.

I love the description routine you do at the beginning in almost every post of your stories, well thought out, with excelent vocab, better than mine no doubt, setting up the scene so that our imagination can actually picture it.

Only miff I have and this is an opinion only, is that the off coloring of the description and actual dialogue doesn't work that well to split and organize visually the story.

First post in Amidst the Sand is my top fav.

<3

[08:11 PM] Dusty Lens said: Well in that case. NUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUKE & #SAVAGE & #STORIES

Backo · 09-13-2018, 08:54 PM,

With the first part of Operation: Sleeping Wyvern out I guess this is a good time to bump this thread and ask for feedback.

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Backo · 03-01-2019, 10:55 PM,

I managed to successfully guilt trip myself into wanting to finish Sleeping Wyvern. Here is your new chapter (after a 3 month hiatus). Feedback appreciated as always. Smile

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Docent · 03-01-2019, 10:59 PM,

I miss Core Valdez *sigh*.

Kaze · 03-01-2019, 11:06 PM,

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[08:11 PM] Dusty Lens said: Well in that case. NUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUKE & #SAVAGE & #STORIES

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