Want to read? Bored? I need some feedback

[Fletcher]

Since I have no clue whether I am writing or heading in the right direction with the stories I have written here to roleplay with, I have had very little to no feedback on them. I would love to see what you think about them. Post about them here since they are in their respective sub-forum. Links included.:)

Colonel Edison Trent, after the Nomad War - Put new chapter in.

Slater, A new Bounty Hunter - A Gunship is on order, once I get one, I'll be writing up a story on it.

The Sentinel, Result of the LASP at Willard Reasearch - I'm currently using this ship actively, its hard to type quickly and in the 'computerized' fashion before a certain criminal tries to blow me up without saying a word... I'd love feedback on this one.:yes:

They're all a wall of text, especially the Slater one, I put a lot of effort into him.:)

Thanks in advance.:yahoo:

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"Oh chuffing blimey, another day, another person being whiney!"
Fletcher's Feedback and Stories Thread

[Zapp]

Only read the last one, but I like it. I'll read the other 2 later.

1 up

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[MB52]

1- I read the Sentianel and like the idea, very well written

2- Slater is also very well thought out, keep up the good work.

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I’ll carry this flag
To the grave if I must
Because it’s flag that I love
And a flag that I trust

[Laowai]

Read Sentinel and Slater

Good read - interesting to see the Sentinel in RP in New York, that would be interesting to play.

I will keep an eye out for slater in space;)

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[MB52]

Your Trent story is also interesting and well written but I do have to say it bothers me a bit when someone RPs an established Hero.

Reason being everyone here played that hero in SP, we all did things different and gained different views on the hero of the nomad war. Now the problem here is alot of those views get shattered with the story. I've seen people as RPing Juni and King also, same effect to me.

*but keep on writing, thats my personal opinion and I'm probably the only one that feels that way*

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I’ll carry this flag
To the grave if I must
Because it’s flag that I love
And a flag that I trust

[Fletcher]

1- I read the Sentianel and like the idea, very well written

2- Slater is also very well thought out, keep up the good work.

The Sentinel idea came from playing Halo 2 on legendary for too long... and skull hunting. But I think they would spice things up from the usual things happening in Liberty territory.

I've always wanted to do a Bounty Hunter, and I heard it was hard to see a BHG player RP'ing, I hope to help break that trend. I think I'm doing ok so far.

Read Sentinel and Slater

Good read - interesting to see the Sentinel in RP in New York, that would be interesting to play.

I will keep an eye out for slater in space;)

Slater will be around, not as much as Sentinel as I am practicing Light Fighter fighting. Aiming is a little more of reflexes now rather than waiting for the ship to turn:laugh: Thanks for the feedback.

Your Trent story is also interesting and well written but I do have to say it bothers me a bit when someone RPs an established Hero.

Reason being everyone here played that hero in SP, we all did things different and gained different views on the hero of the nomad war. Now the problem here is alot of those views get shattered with the story. I've seen people as RPing Juni and King also, same effect to me.

*but keep on writing, thats my personal opinion and I'm probably the only one that feels that way*

I was a bit hesitant on writing an RP on Trent, since as you said is the hero of the SP world. But I think I managed to expand on his role fairly well, and I think he would have stayed in the Order and do recon work with his 'connections' and knowledge.

Thanks for the vote of confidence, I may expand more on the Sentinel project and my Huw.Evans trader, once I decide properly what he is going to do.;)

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"Oh chuffing blimey, another day, another person being whiney!"
Fletcher's Feedback and Stories Thread

[MB52]

Yeah, I have to say it is well written, I just feel a bit uneasy when it comes to re-writing something everyone already has an opinion/story on..

etc- in one person's view trent was a barbaric pirate who did anything to get by, even backstabbing his friends

in another he'd be loyal, as lawful as can be... etc

but keep it up! So far your vision of trent mostly matches mine

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I’ll carry this flag
To the grave if I must
Because it’s flag that I love
And a flag that I trust

[Fletcher]

Forgive the gravedigging, I'll hand you all a shovel later to whack me with. I recently put a new part in the Edison Trent story. Need some opinions on it, I have an idea for his future RP since I'm flying him again lately.

And for those who do read it, no I don't plan on 'turning' him.

Link to the story is in my signature or click the link in original post.

Again sorry for gravedig, commence the shovelling.

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"Oh chuffing blimey, another day, another person being whiney!"
Fletcher's Feedback and Stories Thread

[kacijon]

A story about Bounty hunter is Great. NIce old job hehe .

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