Feedback on 'Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra' RP

[Exile]

Do what i do.

Write it in a disco file. Like you would make any other thread. Use word to spell-chek. And save on a notepad or summut like media fire.

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[tfmachad]

"Come with me, corazon," they overheard as the soldier woman raised the girl from the floor."

"Come with me, heart"?:huh:

As in, "Come with me, dear."

EDIT: She's being kind and gentle with the girl, in an attempt to have her follow them and be calm.

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Meet the Kriegers - The story of a family and of two men that shared more than just a name
Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra
I Mon'Star: The Strange Case of Elizabeth Wallace

[Jihadjoe]

Shame about your mother taking exception to it man... There are ways around this though mate...

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[Zapp]

I know, and I'm going to try my hardest to keep writing, not gonna let this stop me.

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[tfmachad]

Show her that our story is also about love and caring and... *checks the story so far*
How about we make a bogus link to it, eh?

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Meet the Kriegers - The story of a family and of two men that shared more than just a name
Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra
I Mon'Star: The Strange Case of Elizabeth Wallace

[Jihadjoe]

"...And all the mean ghosts turned into ickle cutesy bunny wabbits and hopped about in joy and sweetness"

sounds about right?

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[tfmachad]

"...And all the mean ghosts turned into ickle cutesy bunny wabbits and hopped about in joy and sweetness"

sounds about right?

I'd say it does. Though I will likely stop writing for it myself if it comes to that. Well, but anyway, let's hope this really ends in jokes and laughs. I'd hate to lose the writing partner that is Zapp.

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Meet the Kriegers - The story of a family and of two men that shared more than just a name
Fantasmas de la Nube Siniestra
I Mon'Star: The Strange Case of Elizabeth Wallace

[Dopamino]

As in, "Come with me, dear."

EDIT: She's being kind and gentle with the girl, in an attempt to have her follow them and be calm.

I understood that part, I just thought that it was an odd choice of words. Of course, my Spanish is rather basic. Is it something that people often say in Hispanic culture?

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I mostly lurk around Media Center these days.

[Zapp]

Dunno, and Gronath is Portuguese, so he doesnt either. Maybe Consuela is a lesbian:crazy:

1 up

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[sovereign]

Maybe Consuela is a lesbian:crazy:

Ssh, not so loud, you'll start getting comments like whenever I bring up Rose Crenshaw. Female Liberty Rogue, what the hell was I thinking...

*goes of to post first bit of that*

*crosses fingers people won't go "ZOMG SEX LOL"*

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