Comic: Tales of Yue Fei

[Xing]

You've seen me experimenting a bit with it...
Now's the serious stuff.

(NOTA: this is read according to manga reading sense.)

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[Tenacity]

nice work, yue. Only a couple things I'm going to criticize here, and only so you can fix them:

1. In the speech portion where yue is about to take off, "All system check, over" should be "all systems check, over" - plural =P

2. In the same speech, efficiency is misspelled.

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[Xing]

also, feel free to post comments ^^

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[Jonathan_Archer_nx01]

nice work, yue. Only a couple things I'm going to criticize here, and only so you can fix them:

1. In the speech portion where yue is about to take off, "All system check, over" should be "all systems check, over" - plural =P

2. In the same speech, efficiency is misspelled.

It's easy to criticize when English is your mother tongue.

[Tenacity]

It's easy to criticize when English is your mother tongue.

I have very good english, and I recognize grammar mistakes/misspellings easily. I care not what language other people speak, I figured yue would want to know if something has an error so it can be fixed, but I am a perfectionist =P

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[NerdRage]

sorry to be a hypocryte, but i reckon we shoulden't post here so the comic can continue, perhaps make a feedback thread? and move the current posts there?

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[Recoil9000]

this is the one and only time I'm going to post here, but this is where I was posting my feedback (and yue's start to the comic stories):

http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=38685

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[Altaris]

Impressive work! Although... i think if you used Poster Edges, it would look much better! Btw, is Yue Fei's model of character from some anime or it is your own Art?

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Carnage itself flying within void...
Proud cardihead ever since 2008...
You all gonna eat cardi!

...also im a troll, so hate me.

[schlurbi]

I really like it.
first the only thing i dislike are the white speech bubbles in 2nd site.
i really like to read more of it, because i dont know much about the Coalition.
It looks really good, and probably needs a lot of work to get those screenshots done for it. I am really excited to see more of that, hopefully a few fights aswell. I want to see more, i dont care misspellings.

I can read and understand everything fine, even when English isnt my Mother Language.

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"Who is it doing this synthetic type of alpha beta psychedelic funkin'?"

[Blackstarr]

Excellent work Yue. You have never failed to impress me lol. I would love to see more. It is a pleasant change from the normalcy of blah forum written stories.

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