Requesting Feedback

[Orin]

Griff Vahl and his History

I kept his history very simple, and very straightfoward. I would appreciate any feedback as to how cohesive the account is, and how well it's written; as simple as the writing style I used here is.

Thank you.

[monsterlancer]

I am no English expert but the only change requested was sent in PM. It is your story.

Looks good. Will there be more?

[Orin]

Thanks for your suggestions.

And not in story form, no. This is an explanation as to why my GMG Leader has a Rheinlander's name, and a history for him as well. You will see more of him, but mostly in diplomatic matters, Guild recruition, message dump content, etc.

Thank you again. Anyone else?

[Orin]

Anyone else, or is Flint my lone feedback'r?

[hypocrisy]
It's a real short read, unlike my other stuff, I'll add. For those of you who are a bit lazy.
[/hypocrisy]

[Emon]

I realize the story isn't finished but er...isnt Griff dead? Or at least missing? I seem to recall something about Orin Hasting inheriting Griff's fortune in one of your other stories.

It's entirely likely that I'm completely off base, but I don't have time to re read all your stories at the moment.

[Orin]

Wow! Someone actually read my stories!

Heh, anyways, good observation. My timelines are very intricate, and Discovery doesn't allow me to play them to perfection.

Them be spoilers, if you will.