Official Valhalla Rising feedback thread...

[MB52]

Alright, so I've gotten to a point in the story where I think I could use some feedback to say if I'm on the right track or not. Keep in mind this is my first attempt at any type of lengthy RP or story, so any feedback, positive or negative is greatly appreciated.

I'm at the point now where I'll be getting writing again (after a month and a half break due to school) and anything will be greatly appreciated.


Thanks. :P



http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=18024

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I’ll carry this flag
To the grave if I must
Because it’s flag that I love
And a flag that I trust

[MB52]

Mega bump!

seriously, I do need feedback on recent events...

Firstly... the attempt to open talks with the Navy and Order which failed
http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=46542

2 my recent post in Valhalla rising
http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=18024

3 my final post in the lawful message dump
http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?sh...mp;#entry724885


I admit the ship will either go rogue, or join the order, however whats the opinion of whats going on now?


Edit- big thanks for Tenacity, Jimmy, Sonja and everyone elsefor the help getting this far.

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I’ll carry this flag
To the grave if I must
Because it’s flag that I love
And a flag that I trust

[MB52]

Please? I'll give a cookie:(

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I’ll carry this flag
To the grave if I must
Because it’s flag that I love
And a flag that I trust

[Hundra]

Wow, talk about the lack of ability to appeal, seriously man.

[Death.RunningVerminator]

Meh, i suppose i will be the first to actually give feedback for ya...

*pats you on back*

Eh... Good... uh.. effort?

[MB52]

Wow, talk about the lack of ability to appeal, seriously man.

Its kinda like what the admiral said, being in the "lawless" space has the effect of changing someone, so does losing friends or family and even a ship.

While maybe there was an opportunity to just "shrug" off and pretend it all never happened, from Jessica's view point, there would be no chances. If the LN said all was ok and she returned, it was probably a trick to get her to come before they arrest her. She may not be the most stable person around atm, due to alot of recent events, maybe paranoid, but she knows what she believes to be true.

Don't take it as the LN forced me to do this, that is far from the truth, I highly respect most members of the LN. In fact I look forward to RP with them in the future. This was something that became apparent as one of the best ways to push the story along, where it had become stagnant.

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I’ll carry this flag
To the grave if I must
Because it’s flag that I love
And a flag that I trust

[jimmy Patterson]

from jims presp[ecxtive jessicas ordeal hurt him no killed him everything liberty and the navy stood for he saw in her this is kinda a slap in the face because it was jess that "nailed the coffen " on jims final retirement/defection was gonna prolly kill jim off or make em freelance interacions with porter prevented that porter kept jim in libertynow hes not so sure what to do as for your story if admins dont et you keep the t-bay then they gotta be blind this storys been going on for months ifnot a year i think

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